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10:08 AM, Friday December 25th 2020

Thank you so much for your critique! And sorry, that you have a lot to write, but i am not a person who is upset (at all) by a longer critique. Infact i am very thankfull for every word, and i am reading everything i can.

I've clearly missed a lot, but i've watched and read everything at least twice. Following is not my greatest ability. I tend to construct my own thoughts pretty quickly and lose some important information. I will work on that.

So i will redo just everything. I hope thats ok

Thanks again!

4:01 AM, Saturday December 26th 2020

If that's what you'd rather do, that's fine. You're still welcome to submit it here as a revision, in which case I'll aim to give more limited feedback based on my initial feedback. Otherwise if you post it as a fresh submission (spending the 2 credits), I'll treat it as a completely new critique, ignoring what I may have called out here, in case it needs to be mentioned again. This second option would be more thorough.

12:26 AM, Tuesday December 29th 2020

Hello again,

it took me a bit longer, as family xmas stuff took up more time than i hoped it would be

However i decided to not to do the hole thing again, as i plan to do most of the course at least 2 more times (with official critique).

Drawing heads wirhout a box shape was trouble at first. In the end with the dog page i got something!

Before that the eye region, especially the cheeks, where pretty hard to draw for me. I see now, that the eye socket is much bigger, than i thought (as you mentioned) and i think the lower corner of the pentagon that you draw for it marks the planechange of the cheek bone?? Is that right?

I hope i am, as it helped me imideately to draw a dog (noticed it on the sketch (i drew a "2" on that one) and applyed it to "3").

I tried to study as much anstomy as i can before. In this case, i could'nt see it at first. So i learned, that i carefully have to watche formstuddys, as it wasn't really obvious in the first time...

Sausages are still not my favorites. I will work on that one!! xd

Thanks again for your critique.

I hope my drawings are good enough to pass.

The Link:

https://imgur.com/gallery/quWfFFz

3:21 AM, Tuesday December 29th 2020

This is vastly better, and it is all clearly much more in line with the techniques shown in the lesson. I can see that earlier on in the first page you were a little uncertain and uncomfortable, but you quickly got up to speed with the particular techniques and used them throughout the rest of the set to produce solid, believable structures without the kinds of visual contradictions that could undermine the viewer's suspension of disbelief.

I ultimately think that deciding to just submit the limited revisions that I requested was the right call - going back through the whole lesson certainly was not necessary.

For the dog's eye sockets, maintaining a straight line across the top of the socket and a point further down does indeed help establish the relationship with the three other main masses - brow ridge across the top (flat line) and the muzzle/cheekbones (two edges with a corner between them) - better. This is probably something I'm going to try and stress when I introduce these concepts more firmly into the new video demos I'll be recording in the coming months.

I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto the 250 cylinder challenge, which is a prerequisite for lesson 6.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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