10:28 PM, Thursday December 23rd 2021
Hello there congrats on finishing lesson one now on to the critique
Lines
The superimposed lines look okay, especially the shorter lines. The longer ones have wobbles, I would say increase the speed of your strokes. Ghosted lines are also not confidently drawn, increase the speed of your strokes. Ghost the line until you are confident with the motion. Then draw in the line, fully commit to the line and draw it with speed. The lines of the ghosted planes are also not that good in quality. They do improve by the second page.
Ellipses
I see a number of ellipses with corners and edges, some with wobbly lines. The ellipses are being drawn favoring accuracy over confidence. You should be focusing on confidence. So you ghost the ellipse where you want to place it until you are confident with the motion. Once confident you should fully commit to the motion and draw it in with speed. It looks like you were drawing them slowly. Draw them with speed from the shoulder. The ellipses are nicely packed in the table of ellipses. They are touching each other and the bounds or walls of the table. For the funnels exercise you should be keeping the ellipses touching but not overlapping. I see some gaps and overlaps here and there. Also use the method above, ghosting and drawing with speed from the shoulder for all ellipses , be they narrow or small.
Boxes
Plotted perspective looks solid, Consider adding line weight to the silhouette of the boxes or where boxes overlap. From the rough perspective exercise keep in mind that the vertical lines of the boxes are perpendicular to the horizon and the horizontal lines of the boxes are parallel to the horizon.
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/3b2783db.jpg
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/72349573.jpg
I think you can see that in the images above,
The initial faces should look like this
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/3b2783db.jpg
as you can see vertical lines are perpendicular to the horizon and horizontal lines are parallel to the horizon.
In your boxes You plotted the points not complying with this, knowing this though should help you plot your lines better. The horizon serves as a great reference.
Your result looks similar to the following
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/6bac0e3b.jpg
Remember this is one point perspective and plan your lines.
Rotated boxes are okay here, most sides rotate, there are multiple places you did not use the edges you had already drawn as reference for the edges you were working on.
Organic perspective looks okay, consider adding line weight where boxes overlap to show dominance or which is closer to the viewer.
I will ask for revision
1 page ghosted lines
1 page take a page and fill it up with ellipses at random, ghost them and execute them with speed. Focus on confidence and not accuracy. So don't draw it slowly or try and make it a certain way, just a circular motion ghosted then executed with speed.
1 page table of ellipses
1 page rough perspective
good luck :)
Next Steps:
1 page ghosted lines
1 page take a page and fill it up with ellipse
1 page table of ellipses
1 page rough perspective