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12:14 AM, Saturday June 20th 2020

Congrats on completing lesson 1!

If you find your pens are dying quickly you may pressing too hard on the paper or storing them incorrectly, though microns are notorious for drying out quickly so it might not be your fault. Take a look at your lesson homework and see if the lines you make leave a impression or slightly dent the paper. If that is the case, experiment with using less pressure. For storage, it is best to store fine liners horizontally.

You can also try to revive your pens by dipping the tip in alcohol for about 10 seconds. If none of those things try switching to a different brand. I have made a bunch of review videos on different brands of fine liner that you can check out here if you need some direction.

For your super-imposed lines you do a good job of keeping your lines pretty straight and confident looking. I do see in your ghosted lines you have some arcing, which you can read about here. This goes away for the most part in your planes homework though. Your planes are pretty well constructed. Most of your lines are straight and appear to be confidently made. I do see some of the arcing I mentioned before so be sure to check out the link I gave you.

Your tables of ellipses look fairly well done. You do a good job of drawing through these ellipses correctly, your ellipses also look confident and fit snuggly in the alloted space. I can see that you struggle a little bit with ending your ellipses cleanly as some of them have little curls at the end. One thing you can do to fix this is try lifting your pen off the page to end your mark instead of trying to stop the motion of your arm. I can see in your ellipses in planes homework that you do maintain a good amount of the same quality your table of ellipses have. There are a few areas where you drew through your ellipses too many times or too few. But overall they look pretty good. I would recommend that you try to draw through your ellipses twice and no more to help you focus more on maintaining a round confident shape for your warm ups. I can see more of the same in your funnels. There is a bit of wobbling to some of them and some of them are tilted along the minor axis. If you ever find your ellipses are slanting try turning the page until they line up correctly.

In your rough perspective homework you placed your boxes fairly well. Your horizontal lines stay largely parallel to the horizon and your vertical lines are fairly perpendicular. You also did a pretty good job of getting your boxes to converge near or on your plotted vanishing points. While it looks like you did a good job of maintaining the quality of your mark making while constructing your boxes, your additional line weight does not match that quality. When you go to add weight to a line it is important that you treat the added weight the same way you would a brand new line. That means taking your time to plan and ghost through your mark so that when you go to execute it the mark blends seamlessly with your previous mark. This will allow you to build and create more subtle and clean looking weight to your lines. You should also avoid making any sort of "correction" to your work. When doing DaB you want to do the homework to the best of your current ability and then move on. That means accepting your mistakes and leaving them visible as you move on.

The rotated boxes exercise is a challenging and complex exercise. You did well for your first try, your boxes appear carefully constructed and you did a good job maintaining the same quality in your mark making throughout. Your additional line weight looks a little better and more consistent here as well. The main thing I notice about your boxes here is that you did not actually rotate your boxes along the major axes. This is a common mistake and you can read more about it here.

Finally, you have a good start with your organic perspective boxes. You do a pretty good job of getting your sets of lines to converge consistently towards their shared vanishing point. Keep in mind what I mentioned here about how to go about adding weight to your lines and you should continue to see improvement going forwards.

Next Steps:

Continue to the 250 Box Challenge!

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8:34 PM, Saturday July 4th 2020

Thanks for the critique! I'm gonna mind all the things going forward.

After I submitted I got another 2 pens and they both died but it turned out I was in fact going to hard on them due to my arm being new to the whole drawing from arm situation. Luckily I got now another I even managed to get the staedtler one which I'm super happy about. Thanks a lot for sharing your yt channel, it didn't help the pen situation at that time but definitely helped with drawing boxes and lesson 2 later.

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