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1:22 AM, Wednesday December 1st 2021

Hey there! Good job on completing lesson 2!

Arrows: These arrows look confident, and you were not afraid to cross over. However, there is a lack of perspective in your arrows. Remember that Uncomfortable mentioned that he wanted us to convey perspective with the arrows by varying size from one end to the other. This usually means drawing what you want to be closer to you as bigger, and drawing what you want further away as smaller. Another thing I noticed was that the shadows tend to be inconsistently placed on your arrows. One thing that helps me is to figure out which part of the arrow is over or covering which. The part that is being covered will receive the shading since it is getting the shadow from the overlapping part. I would recommend looking over this section once again and practicing this as warmup. You will have to do this section again in lesson 3, so make sure you grasp this section.

Organic Forms: The organic forms look confident and fine to me. However, when it comes to the ellipses, you missed one of the key things Uncomfortable mentioned: don't have them floating arbitrarily. Make sure that the ellipses are touching the ends of the organic form similar to how you did it in the funnels exercise. It seems that you varied the degrees of the ellipses well, so I would encourage you do redo this page again and review this section to get a better understanding. As for the contour lines section, it looks fantastic as is. I would encourage you to do these as warmups.

Texture Analysis: In the first sections of each texture, you understood the exercise well. In the second section, while you grasp the idea of making notes, sometimes it might help to draw out demonstrations of the shadows. For example, for wood, you mentioned "constant dips and cracks." Maybe drawing an example or two of that in that section may help you in the third section. As for the third section, it looks a little incomplete. I think you grasped that the shadows should taper off as you get to the right side, but it seems that the shadows taper too soon. Plus, on the left side, the shadows should blend seemlessly with the black bar, such that you can't tell that there is a black bar. This is a little easier said than done. One thing I might suggest is trying to invert the shadow at the beginning and then converting it to the normal shadow texture near the middle. Since you will have to do a 25-texture analysis challenge later, I would not worry about doing this again, but I would re-read this section and prepare yourself for this challenge. If you want, you can start it now, or you can start it later. I would recommend starting it sometime soon while you are either redoing the exercises here or doing the next lesson.

Dissections: Your dissections look really good and you managed to make some of them pop off of the form itself. Ideally, you would want to do about five sausages per page and have 4-5 textures per sausage. I don't think you need to redo this, but this would be even more reason to delve into the 25-texture challenge early on to grasp how to convey textures better.

Form Intersections: This is probably the most challenging exercise in this lesson, so it is okay to struggle with it. Your forms look confident, but I am having trouble seeing how they intersect. It seems that the intersections are either very shallow (sometimes even just face-to-face for some forms) or they curve around the other form (like the cylinder around the sphere on page 3). I would recommend redoing three pages of this exercise, and start off with just boxes. In fact, if you still feel confused after doing one page of boxes, feel free to do all three pages with box intersections. This is fine, too. I'll also link a pack of form intersections for you to look at: https://m.imgur.com/a/6Inx5Bz. You can look over it and see how different forms interact with each other. This helped me a lot, and I'm sure it can help you.

Organic Intersections: Your forms look very confident, and some look like they are placed pretty well. However, some look a little stiff, like the second big sausage on page one. Also, looking at it, some sausages look incomplete, but it could be that I have trouble understanding where the sausage begins and ends. I would recommend darkening the outlines of the forms as they go over another form to make it clear which form is in front. Also, keep in mind how shadows work on these forms. I noticed on page one that for the second big sausage, the shadow is floating above the first big sausage and not conforming to it. Shadows will fall onto the surface below it and conform to it. I would recommend incorporating this into your warmup so you can better grasp this exercise

Overall, nice work, and there is still a little more work to be done. I would recommend redoing the ellipses section of the organic forms and three pages of form intersections. Once you complete that, you can submit them here again through this submission and I'll try to check on them. Also, make sure you do arrows and organic intersections as warmups. They will be handy for the next lessons.

Next Steps:

1 page of organic forms: ellipses section

3 pages of form intersections

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
7:12 PM, Sunday February 27th 2022

Thank you for reviewing my work! I managed to practice the steps you provided me and I managed to understand a bit better on how the form intersections actually looked thanks to the link you provided. I still need a lot more practice and work, but I posted some revisions I made here https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1bhR9wAIsg66aJWcxFqHBwLIuG8cq3jGG. Once again, thank you for taking the time to make this post. I learned a lot thanks to to your guidance.

1:32 AM, Thursday March 3rd 2022

Hey! Thanks for taking the time to do these. (And sorry for the late response). I think the ellipses look much better. It looks like you got the ellipses to better touch the forms. One thing to continue working on is how the degrees vay throughout ellipses. I touched on it a little in my review, and I should have expounded a bit more. You did well in varying the degrees, but make sure that they vary properly. The ellipses closest to you should have a narrower degree than ellipses further away from you. I would just keep practicing this during your warm up.

As for the form intersections, I think you improved on this, too. I can tell that you were thinking of how they interact with each other. I also appreciate that you stuck with boxes. Just make sure to continue to draw confidently and also force yourself to connect the boxes to each other, rather than having a clumps of boxes. Also, when you feel comfortable, feel free to try out other 3D forms, like cylinders and spheres. Just continue working on this for warmup, too.

I think you did well, and I am fine allowing you to move on to lesson 3. Good luck

Next Steps:

Continue to lesson 3.

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