Don't have much to add as the other comment was pretty complete, there are a few things I want to however:
-You're repeating some lines that were wrong, no matter how off a line is, don't repeat it.
-There are some boxes you aren't completing on organic perspective which suggest me you might be rushing a bit.
-Same with the lines, they get worse on the boxes. Remember you should take care of each line as if it were a single ghosted lines exercises, take your time with them.
-On funnels, the minor axis has to cut the ellipses in 2 identical halves, be sure you're aiming for it.
-On rotated boxes, some of your boxes weren't actually rotating, careful with that, this mistake is explained here.
-You've also not kept corners between boxes close on rotated boxes as well, don't forget to do it.
Next Steps:
Before marking this as complete, do 1 page of table of ellipses, 1 page of funnels, and 1 page of organic perspective, reply here and I'll go over it
Good job on completing the revisions! I'll point out what I can find so you can keep improving:
Ellipses are looking p confident overall, though there are some instances where they get a bit wobbly. Remember, just like with lines, ghost until you're confident, and then draw that motion confidently without worrying about accuracy, trust your muscle memory.
On the tables of ellipses, remember the ellipses need to touch each other, and to touch top and bottom lines. And same goes for funnels, they need to touch. I understand you can fail at it, as it's hard, but be sure you are always keeping it in mind, and aiming for it.
In organic perspective, the same thing goes. Plot your lines, starting first with the starting dot, and ending with the end dot. Ghost your line until you're confident, and then draw a stroke with your shoulder. You have fraying on both ends on your lines, so I think you aren't plotting them.
And another issue is that you are repeating some lines, remember, never repeat a line, no matter how off it is, as it will clutter the drawing, and make it harder to read.
Next Steps:
First of all, congratulations on finishing lesson 1! Your next step is the box challenge.
As I marked this as complete, you are now qualified to critique lesson 1 submissions.
-Doing critiques is a way of learning and solidifying concepts. I can atest to that after having done hundreds of critiques. There are a lot of concepts that I did not understand, and thanks to critiquing I started understanding them. Which made me learn a lot more through the course.
-Another thing is that as the number of current submissions is super high, if you critique some critiques, those would be less critiques I'd have to critique before reaching your next submissions, so you'd get your critiques faster.
It's totally optional of course, I won't force anyone to give critiques. But me and the other people who are critiquing would be super grateful if you gave it a shot.
Good luck on the box challenge, and keep up the good work!
NOTE: here's a quick guide on critiquing lesson 1 submissions.
There are a few people that feel hesitant to critique because they feel they aren't ready to it so hopefully it'll help you in case you are one of those people.
I dont have much to say as im still on lesson 1 but ive got a few pointers that may help you out. Starting with your superimposed lines I see that a-lot of your lines are fraying at the beginning and don't really have a clear starting point. Next with you ghosted lines. You hit most of your point but i still see a little bit of wobble. when your drawing make sure you use your whole arm with one fluid motion with confidence. Same thing with your ghosted planes with the ellipses. When your doing the ghosted planes with ellipses try to fit more on the page and make sure that the ellipses are fitting snug inside the plane. Onto your table of ellipses. looking at your ellipses i see that they are very wobbly and have alot of space in between them. The wobble is most likely caused by not using your whole arm. Its also the same thing with your ellipses in the funnels. Make sure they are closer together as well. For plotted perspective you did pretty good but make sure that the third vp or the vertical lines that make the face of the cubes are perpendicular with the horizon. That's all the tips I have if any of them weren't clear please reply back. You may also want to post this to other places like discord or the reddit to see if you can get more feedback as well. I also noticed that you asked if you should redo them. I think that redoing them may help you but also re reading the lessons may as well. I hope this helped!
Hi, thanks so much for the clear response and input. My own reflection on areas I needed to improve kind of matched with a lot of the areas you pointed issues out in. Could you suggest which exercises to redo specifically / what to do before completion? Thanks again :)
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The reason this book is close to my heart is because of its introduction, where Brom goes explains in detail just how he went from being an army brat to one of the most highly respected dark fantasy artists in the world today. I believe that one's work is flavoured by their life's experiences, and discovering the roots from which other artists hail can help give one perspective on their own beginnings, and perhaps their eventual destination as well.
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