6:28 PM, Sunday May 8th 2022
Alrighty, lets take a look.
Starting with the positive, I can see you’re varying the degree of both your contour curves and contour ellipses now, great work! You’ve also drawn the tiny ellipse at an end that faces the viewer on all of these, good job. You’re heading in the right direction. For your forms with contour lines I noticed that all 3 have a pattern of wide-narrow-wide, without flipping direction. This isn’t any of the options shown in this image I shared with you last time https://imgur.com/a/yDBbayD and I wonder what orientation you are trying to convey? If it was just one of the three I’d put it down to experimentation, but you did it with all of them so I worry you might still be confused. I’ve put together two examples with a banana, I hope they might help you understand https://imgur.com/a/DpKhA9I https://imgur.com/a/rYnLT0t sometimes this stuff makes more sense if we look at examples in real life to help. I think what you’ve done is fine, for a lesson 2 standard, so I won’t make you do it again. Keep practising these for warm ups though, this stuff is important.
Something I skipped over earlier, because I saw Beckerito had already brought it up in your lesson 4 critique a few days ago and highlighted it in bold for you, but sadly doesn’t seem to have stuck- don’t forget to draw through your ellipses twice. This is not optional. Comfy discusses it in the ellipses section of lesson 1 and I’ll quote him here “As you get better, your ellipses will tighten up - the gaps between your successive passes will shrink and eventually your ellipses will appear much cleaner. At this point you'll probably be able to nail your ellipses in one pass, but I still want you to continue drawing through them for all of the Drawabox lessons. Outside of Drawabox, you're free to do what you like.” It’s even shown as a common mistake in the exercise instructions here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/drawthroughellipses Make sure you draw through all your ellipses throughout the cylinder challenge as you move forward. I’d also encourage you to hook your contour lines around a bit more, like you were earlier. Cutting them off abruptly can sometimes flatten out your forms.
Lastly, I want to call out that you’ve drawn two of your organic forms almost as ellipses. The bottom right and one of the bottom middle ones. This is something I noted in the markup of your work before. The one on the top right https://imgur.com/a/arQirEs and is also noted as a common mistake in the “keep your sausages simple” https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/simplesausage section on the lesson page (on the image, under "none of these"). Using ellipses instead of organic forms in your constructions can stiffen them up, so try to keep them with a more consistent width along their length when you practice these in the future.
So, you have a lot to think about and work on, but this is fine for lesson 2 so I’ll mark this as complete. If you want to make another page to see if you can apply the things I’ve mentioned and reply with it, I’ll be happy to check it, but I won’t hold you back or make you do it.
Next Steps:
Feel free to move on to lesson 3- oh wait you already have lol.