Feel free to go as hard with crticism as you like. I sure hope, I did take my time with this. Anyway, here it is. I don't know what else to say really, I'll just say crticism is heavily apperciated I think. Since that is part of this course. Heh.
Can't quite make out if you're working in pencil or pen? Anywho, your ellipses in funnels are a little too loose and not equally bisected by the minor axis. I recommend re-reading that homework explanation and the examples of what to do vs what not to do. Also, I really recommend in future using a ruler for your minor bisecting line, and a coffee lid or some other large round shaped object for the funnel so you have a nice symmetrical area to work in and can be a better judge of whether or not you're making symmetrical ellipses.
Your ghosted lines arch and wobble a little bit, which indicates you're not fully committing to using your shoulder and a smooth trajectory.
Your super imposed lines appear to start a little off the mark so really focus on hitting that initial dot at the start of every new line. It looks like on some of your lines you flick off at the top, try and be conscious of that and work on your follow through being straight as you lift your pen off the paper at the end of your line.
It looks like you have a good sense of space with your organic boxes and how they turn in space, but you've strayed away from prioritizing confidence in your lines and resorted to wobbly lines for the sake of accuracy. Remember, confidence first, accuracy comes later through repetition and lots of ghosting.
Your rotated boxes appear to be a bit all over the place, with some boxes popping out way over the top of others, but your lines look a bit more confident here. All of the lines in this exercise are essentially supposed to be parallel to each other but some of your boxes don't line up with each other.
Your ellipses in planes look fairly confident but it looks like you're looping around more than the recommended two to three times suggested. Also you're out of the edges on most of the planes.
Your plotted perspective looks pretty on point except for that second row on the first page with that first box on the left. That back wall of said box appears way out of perspective.
Your rough perspective boxes are way off from the vanishing point, which is fine, but hopefully you got more of a grasp of just how dramatic the angles need to be to hit the correct vanishing points or come close since none of us are perfect. Again with the boxes the confidence seems lacking on some of the lines.
Your table of ellipses look pretty good other than looping a few times too many and coming out of bounds/not touching the bounds, but they look better than the ellipses from the previous assignments so good job on the improvement!
All in all you're coming along just fine, just really take to heart striving to improve on all of the points mentioned, and maybe re-read through some of the sections just to further cement what the lessons are trying to drive home. Other than that, keep on trucking and push on with the next lesson!
Oh! I didn't except an critque to pop up so quick. Thank you so much, on answering though. I will really take these to heart.
And yes I was using pen, even though it may not seem like it due to the lighting and camera, heh. I will make sure to reread the lessons and try the excercises again following your advice. However, I do have one question if you don't mind answer it that is.
How do I know if I'm truly taking my time with the excerises or not? Because, I'm not really sure if I am rushing or if I am taking my time.
With that, Thank you so much for the critque! I can not stress that enough, heh.
Anyway, Thank you again.
No problem!
As for your question, that's something I struggle with myself. My own criteria as of late is to really focus and commit to each line I put down, even if it means resetting my posture, sitting position, or taking a deep breath and focusing on relaxing my shoulders since I'll notice they tense up. I guess really, just be very conscientious of what you're doing throughout the assignments and if you're in that head space you'll be working at the right tempo if I had to wager. The more cerebral you are about the process, the better, and the more you'll most likely take your time, and by effect absorb the information better and learn faster.
Like the Staedtlers, these also come in a set of multiple weights - the ones we use are F. One useful thing in these sets however (if you can't find the pens individually) is that some of the sets come with a brush pen (the B size). These can be helpful in filling out big black areas.
Still, I'd recommend buying these in person if you can, at a proper art supply store. They'll generally let you buy them individually, and also test them out beforehand to weed out any duds.
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