first of all good effort

• i could see some problems in line weight add line weight where we need to grab more attention instead of doing it everywhere

• construct the forms on top in relation to the base forms we created initially

• i think you are doing sketches with a marker try to get some fineliners it improve the quality of markmaking

• thats it best wishes for lesson 5

Hi again Stengon!

I've checked your submission,

On your organic forms you should start varying the degrees of the ellipses, just as I critiqued you on your branches on your last lesson, the same can be applied here. Remember that is a key element to sell the illusion of depth. Here is the demo I sent you last time, just to refresh your memory!

Now, seeing your insects, I can clearly see a lot of improvement from your last lesson, they look more 3d, more cohesive and settled on their space! However, there is still lots of room for improvement on line quality (which also got better since last lesson), visual clarity and as you've already said, the legs.

Let's start out with the legs, the first issue that I'm seeing is that you are doing the sausages more like stretched balls than actual sausages, this is something Uncomfy repeats quite a lot during the lesson(like in here). The main difference between these two forms is that the sausages give the legs the gesture and flow that they actually have, while the stretched balls end up looking really stiff.

Another thing that I wanted to talk about is a mistake I also made during this lesson, which is not really completing the joints of the legs with more mass, here is exactly what I mean. After doing the sausage construction, it doesn't end there, you need to add the mass of the joints. Also remember that this extra mass you add to the legs has to respect the underlying construction and forms you have already lay down, think about it like the organic intersections method, were the mass added always goes along the surface of the mass that is already there.

Now, your line quality has gotten better since last lesson, though I'm still seeing that you are applying line weight to basically every line without putting much though behind it; this is a pretty common mistake because there is a misunderstanding on the use of line quality in this course. Line quality and cast shadows are tools that we use to make things more clear to the viewer, as we construct, we tend to make things pretty messy, so after we are done with all the construction, we apply line weight and cast shadows to show which parts are on top of which and hopefully make everything more clear.

Always when you are about to to apply some line weight, take your time to think of what are you trying to show and always do it subtly.

Regarding what you said about about aplying black to pop out the structure, it has a little to do with what we have already talk about and cast shadows. One thing that really helps me, is to set an arbitrary light source direction and then apply the shadows.

Overall, you did a great job on these constructions, you are really developing a grip on form and space, though I'm gonna ask for only one page of revision and then we are done!