Hi ElevenSeventeen. I'm DrawingJerry and I'll to be critiquing your submission.

So here's how it's going to go. I'm going to be critiquing your work in 3 big chunks: Lines, Ellipsis, and Boxes. I'll be pointing out areas to improve and other nitbits that I feel should be mentioned.

• LINES

Your lines aren't fraying on both ends on your Super Imposed Lines, and I can't see any repeated lines on your Ghosted Lines and planes. You also seemed to have plotted all your lines. Great Job!

But I do see some areas that you could improve. Notably your line confidence. Most of your ghosted lines and planes are pretty wobbly. In drawabox you should always prioritize confidence over accuracy, so try to focus more on making your lines straight rather than focusing on connecting the dots accurately.

Here's some resources to help you out:

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/3/smooth

https://discord.com/channels/365036548820959242/368870697742630912/1081537593373642842

• ELLIPSIS

Before I go into my critique, I want to congratulate you on finishing all 5 pages of the ellipsis exercise! Ellipsis are hard to draw and these exercises are always a nightmare to finish(at least for me lol) so give yourself a pat on the back for your hard work. Anyway getting back on topic, you've drawn through your ellipsis twice as instructed and you seemed to have made an effort to draw them as tightly together as possible. However, just like your lines, your ellipsis also lack confidence. Most of them are pretty wobbly. Also I suggest that you try to fit your ellipsis more snuggly next time you do your funnel exercises as your warm ups.

• Boxes

Your Plotted perspective is great. If I had to point one thing out, the hatching on your boxes(The black part) should be done using the ghosted method. So keep that in mind when you redo this exercise for your warm up.

In your Rough Perspective exercise, your width and height lines are both parallel and perpendicular to the horizon line, and you also used line corrections. Great job!

You don't seem to have finished your rotated boxes and Organic perspective exercises, so I'm going to have to ask you to do those again.

For reference, this is what a finished page of rotated boxes and organic perspective looks like:

https://imgur.com/NMeSOlY

https://imgur.com/gallery/dUHyRj4

Don't focus too much on how your boxes look. Just try to finish the exercise to the best of your ability :)

Overall, great work! and congratulations for finishing your first lesson on Drawabox! I am going to have to ask you to do some revisions, as previously mentioned.

Well I gotta say you are improving. When I looked at your submission I noticed that you did some mistakes (as we all do) but in the later pages you improved those mistakes.

So before I tell you 'bout the areas you need to work on I would Say

KEEP IT UP MAN !

For the ghosted lines I would like to say that the lines are too short and they're mostly of the same size so I would say next time you do that please try variations in line length. No matter how they end up but do some longer lengths.

We're DOING these exercises TO BUILD CONFIDENCE and loosen up anxiety in markmaking. Don't worry WE WILL GET BETTER.

In your ellipses in plan exercise I've noticed that some ellipses are not even touching the two sides that thet are meant to touch.

In the rotated boxee exercise you haven't clearly drawn through some boxes which is required. And your boxes in diagonal areas are not even complete. So work on that.

In your rough perspective exercise boxes are very wobbly. Try to do that with confidence. They may end up a bit deformed but they should look drawn with confidence.

In organic perspective the boxes seem to be of the same size along the curve with some variation in sizes that don't matchup with their position along the curve.

They are meant to get big in size when they are near the end point and smaller when they are near the starting point.

The boxes on the straight axis in the rotated box exercise are ok but the boxes that are in the diagonal areas are not following the perspective.

So, go through the material again. Try to understand how they should be drawn. Observe how they are drawn in the sample homework sheet shown in the exercise page. Take your time and do it again.