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7:32 PM, Wednesday June 30th 2021

Lines: You have a lot of fraying on both ends of your Superimposed Lines. I think you need to go back and re-do both pages. and take the time to set your pen in the right spot each time. Everything else seems alright though, including your Ghosted Lines, which look incredibly smooth and confident for someone just starting out.

Ellipses: I think you went a bit overboard with your Table of Ellipses by filling in every last little crevice. I'm not sure drawing circles that small really helps any. Your other exercises look fine for now though.

Boxes: For your Plotted Perspective, I see you tried to keep it clean for the first row. Normally you should extend all the way to the VPs to check your perspective, but you did that for the other two rows so it's no big deal. Similarly for your Rough Perspective, you probably should've tried to extend the lines of the box you crossed out anyway, as hard as it is to try to accept your mistakes when you mess up that hard (trust me, I've been there). But again, no big deal. Your Rotated Boxes look a bit funny. If the box in the center is "Tier 1", then the transition in perspective from Tier 2 to Tier 3 is too extreme. I appreciate how there's a substantial improvement between the first and second page of your Organic Perspective.

Next Steps:

You need to re-do both pages of your Superimposed Lines. This exercise is a foundation to building up your skillset, so it's important you get it right.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
4:21 AM, Monday July 12th 2021

Thanks for the feedback. I dove back in this evening. while I don't see the pages as perfect, I could feel during the exercise the moments when I was "getting it" and then "losing it again" (maybe doing this one at 10:30 at night didn't help), but I look forward to your review.

https://imgur.com/a/d5UJjLs

4:22 AM, Thursday July 15th 2021

Well, there is much less fraying than before, which is good, but I may have told you wrong in the first place. Between when I gave your first critique and this one, I had my own work critiqued as well, and they recommended I work more on Ghosted Planes instead of Ghosted Lines to help my penmanship, and maybe I should've had you do the same.

I hope I didn't waste your time by making you re-do the Superimposed Lines. I'll go ahead and mark you as complete. You'll also have plenty of opportunities to practice with the 250 Box Challenge.

Next Steps:

Go ahead and move on to the 250 Box Challenge, but also remember to set the time aside to work on Ghosted Planes as well, perhaps as a warm-up.

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11:21 PM, Monday August 23rd 2021

This is literally my first time back at the work since July 11th (that busy life and those spinning plates again). Clearer path in front of me now (I think.)

No worries on sending me back to the superimposed lines. There's no such thing as too much practice (well, there might be, but I'm sure that I haven't hit anywhere near that level).

I'll definitely warm up with the ghosted planes first and start moving on to the 250 box challenge. Also, I do have a note saying "This community member feels the lesson should be marked as complete. In order for the student to receive their completion badge, this critique will need 2 agreements from other members of the community." is that something I have to submit for, or something you'd pass on to folks "in the know"?

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