Hi,

Just a couple things I'd like to point out but overall your submission is pretty solid! I think (this I particularly noticed with the arrows) your line confidence needs to be focused on. Some of the linework in your arrows seems hesitant, giving it that 'furry' edge. I will say though, your second page is a lot better!

Your textures look great! I think with the analysis you would have benefited from observing and marking a bit more in the initial boxes, though the concept seems to have translated well to your dissections. I particularly like the 'hairier' ones. This is something I struggle with myself so it certainly helps to see others pull it off. If anything I'd say a lot of them are a little too uniform? I think if you were to do it again, play around with the idea of leaving areas of blank space to suggest a lit area and parts where the texture dissolves into darkness. You've definitely tried the former on your second page though!

One last thing - remember, if you're going to add shading/hatching/shadows/whatever to your submissions, it's best to completely fill them. There's a fair bit of hatching with a lot of little white spaces that translates as unnecessary noise. I got myself one of those pentel pocket brush pens and that works great. I hope this helps.

All the best,

Jekettex