9:18 PM, Thursday August 20th 2020
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Arrows: I see lots of woobliness, especially in the first page but also in the second. Remember to put your marks down with confidence. Another "mistake" that I see in all of them is that you thin out too much all of them. It's great you are thinking about foreshortening, but it's not necessary to make it so extreme, at least not in all of them. Maybe take another look at the sample homework.
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Your sausages are better in comparison, but there still are some mistakes. First, don't mark where the center of the ellipse would be. The lessons doesn't ask you to do it, and it doesn't for a reason: it's not necessary here. Second, some ellipses are too wobbly. Remember to ghost them properly and it should happen much less.
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Your dissections are okay, but I see scratches in a good number of them. Take time to observe and understand the form before marking. I think you understood correctly the texture analysis exercise, but you left blank spaces in the squares on the left and that's a big NO. Fill the squares, cram as much as you can in them. Take more time and be a bit more careful in the gradients: fill in the black carefully, especially at the edges. I promise they will look so much better, especially the tree bark. Lastly, you are not fully transitioning to white, and that is a big part of the learning here.
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Form intersections: you are not filling the pages! You absolutely should. Don't worry about it getting confusing, it will, but you will also learn much more (and save the planet by saving paper!). If you really worry about it not getting too messy, use hatching lines on some sides of the forms. I also see stretched forms, especially the cilinders. That's another NO. In general, you should read again the instructions of this exercise. The intersections themselves look convincing, though you should practice a bit more the intersections between curved forms.
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Organic intersections: The first pile is too small. Literally only 4 of them. Fill the page more! The second pile is much better, but there's still wobbliness in your lines.
I see wobbliness in all the exercises, are you still practicing the lesson 1 exercises that focus on it? But hey, good work. I see more effort here than in lots of other submissions. Keep working on the exercises and maybe revisit the instructions one in a while, because we sometimes forget important details.
Next Steps:
Form intersections. I'm not going to ask to remake them from scratch, but at least fill to completion the pages you already have!