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5:34 PM, Thursday January 28th 2021
edited at 5:42 PM, Jan 28th 2021

Superimposed lines: Solid. A nice variety of lengths for your straights and some nice "C" shaped curves. Be sure to implement more "S" shaped curves in the future. I'm noticing some fraying on both ends of your lines, be sure to carefully place your pen down on its mark before making your stroke. We'll work on the fanning and accuracy issues throughout Lesson 1. Be sure that your rotating your page to find the optimal position for your shoulder to make that straight stroke from point to point.

Ghosted Lines: Needs Work. Their is a consistent wobble to your lines and some of you lines miss both plotted points. Be sure that your are: rotating that page, ghosting the strokes as many times as needed, carefully place your pen down on its mark, and in one smooth motion from your shoulder put down your line. Focus more at creating straight lines over accurate ones at this early stage.

Table of Ellipses: Solid. We got two full pages with many of the Ellipses touching with minimal overlapping. Keep ghosting your ellipses and focus on drawing though them completely twice and smoothly. Keep in mind that the Ellipses should have the same orientation in each section of your table. We want to carefully consider what kind of Ellipse we want to draw and repeat it in that section of the table.

Ghosted Planes/Ellipses in Planes: Needs Work. We got two full pages with many panes and angles drawn. I'm concerned about the amount of wobble and general waviness to your lines. We'll solve the under and overshooting of your lines with continued practice but we'll need to get a nice straight line for you to succeed at these exercises. Be sure that you take your time with every single line. Plot your points, Rotate the page, ghost your stroke, and create a confident line from your shoulder. The Ellipses are solid. They are drawn through, mostly smooth and fitted properly in their plane.

Funnels: Needs Work. The funnels are properly constructed and many of the Ellipses are smooth and drawn though twice and the minor axis cuts the ellipses in half. Far too many of your Ellipses are circular, though. You'll find it much more difficult to maintain an even shape and lack of tilt with oblong Ellipses.

Plotted Perspective: Very Good. We have some line correcting and lines missing their mark. Be sure to take your time and I would recommend using a clear ruler so you can easily keep track of your lines. I would also suggest adding hatching to the front face of your boxes in the future.

Rough Perspective: Good. The boxes are drawn through and you are using a straight edge to create guide lines back towards the V.P. You also seem to understand the basics of the exercise with your horizontal and vertical line being parallel and perpendicular to the horizon line and your angled lines heading back to a single V.P. I would again suggest adding hatching to the front face of your boxes, it's good practice. Also I would suggest that you don't put more than 6 boxes to each frame in this exercise. You want to be able to study how your lines fall towards the V.P and that gets a little tricky when you have so many crisscrossing towards the V.P.

Rotated Perspective: Good. This is a pretty good first effort. The image is large, all of the boxes have been attempted and many of them are indeed rotating. Consider adding hatching and line weight to help with clarity.

Organic Perspective: Solid. It's a good effort. Consider adding line weight t the silhouette of your boxes with one additional stroke. We'll learn more about the "Y" method of constructing boxes and working with 3 point perspective in the 250 box challenge. Remember no matter how complicated some of these exercises may get; always go back to the basics of :Plotting your points, Rotating your Page, Ghosting your strokes, and creating confident lines that originate from your shoulder.

Overall Thoughts: Good. The instructions have been followed and the work has been completed. I'm concerned about some of the wobble to your lines and that the funnel exercise wasn't quite completed as intended.

Next Steps:

  • Ghosted Planes: Make sure you plot every single line; the cross that bisects your plane included. Be sure to take your time with rotating your page, and ghosting your strokes and focus on that smooth confident motion from your shoulder. Don't be too concerned if some of your lines under or overshoot their mark. We'll have plenty of time to practice these exercises as a Warm-up during the 250 box challenge.

  • Funnels: I would like you to submit another page of funnels. Try to create ellipses that are oblong with an even shape and no tilt so they are evenly cut in half by the minor axis. Don't worry about them being perfect, again we'll have plenty of time to practice these exercises in the future.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 5:42 PM, Jan 28th 2021
2:47 AM, Wednesday February 10th 2021

Hey there! I'm not sure if your still with us but I got some notes from a Teachers Assistant about this critique and feel I should pass it on to you.

First off, do not worry about redoing the Funnel Exercises. They feel that them being circular is perfectly fine. They also feel you need to focus on creating smooth ellipses and making sure you follow the one line, one stroke rule. No matter how far off a line may be we should only draw it once. Also when doing the Ghosted Planes exercise be sure to carefully put your pen down on its plotted point before making your final stroke.

That's all from me. Cheers and Happy Drawing.

11:13 AM, Tuesday May 4th 2021

Hi, sorry for the late reply.

Thanks for taking the time to go through my work in detail, I'll be sure to practice what you recommended!

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