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8:57 AM, Thursday October 26th 2023
Hi! I'll be critiquing you're lesson 1 today
Lines
Superimposed lines
Great job with this exercise! There's not that much fraying on the lines, except for the longer lines. You need to work more on the longer lines, there's a lot more fraying compared to the shorter lines, but that's about it for this exercise. Remember to ghost the lines before placing them!
Ghosted Lines
I do see a bit of wobbling and arching, but that's fine. With practice, your lines should get more smooth and confident.
Ghosted Planes
There is a slight wobble to some of the planes but overall it looks fine
Ellipses
Tables of Ellipses
Some of the Ellipses are kind of going into each other, and e are a few that are going out of the boundary/rectangle,and there are spots where you could put extra Ellipses too. I feel like the Ellipses could be a bit smoother with a little bit more ghosting. Other than that nice job
Ellipses in Planes
Nice job with this one, a majority of the ellipses are touching all the sides of the planes, but the Ellipses could be more smoother.
Funnels
For the Funnels, Good job with that one. A majority of them seem aligned, and again the Ellipses should be a bit more smooth with a bit more ghosting.
Boxes
Plotted Perspective
Plotted Perspective looks fine
Rough Perspective
When doing this exercise the back shape of the box should be around the same as the front like this https://imgur.com/a/U6KBuu3, while still going towards the Vanishing Point, and remember "width lines should be parallel to horizon and height lines perpendicular to horizon", which you did pretty well on,but some of the lines have a little wobble.
Rotated Boxes
The outside boxes for the Horizontal and Vertical rotations are really off. It shouldn't be extending out that much. Think of it as the center box rotating up/down, instead of thinking of it as an entirely new box. something like this https://imgur.com/a/XP8WIb3.
Organic Perspective
Nice job with this one. The boxes are rotating enough.
Great job with Lesson 1. The random doodles and font were pretty cool love the creativity. Other than that I'll have you revise a few of the exercises and after that you should be able to move onto the 250 box challenge
Next Steps:
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Half a page of "Rough Perspective"
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Full page of "Rotated boxes"
10:06 PM, Thursday October 26th 2023
Thanks for the critique! Yeah, I realized that the rotated boxes was pretty off, but I was already committed haha. I'll redo those ones with your suggestions!
2:39 PM, Tuesday October 31st 2023
Btw, they don't really need to redo the rotated boxes. It's not really advisable (correct me if I'm wrong). Also, their rotated boxes is looking good for their first try. Of course there are still mistakes in the perspective of their boxes, but this will be work on during the 250 box challenge.
Also, in the rotated boxes section of the lesson 1, Uncomfortable says "All I ask is that you complete the exercise - not perfectly, not even well. Just finish it to the best of your current ability. I ask for nothing more than that."
3:39 AM, Thursday November 2nd 2023
Oh, my bad. Kind of critiqued this late at night, so I didn't really go back to check much on the lesson notes. Sorry if I made them do extra work
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