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9:56 PM, Saturday April 16th 2022
edited at 10:12 PM, Apr 16th 2022

In superimposed lines you did not use a ruler. Many lines have fraying on both ends. Lines are generally smooth and confident.

In ghosted lines are many not connected lines. That's why I can't see what points you wanted to connect.

Ghosted planes are mostly good.

The table of ellipses are mostly good.

In the ellipses in planes ellispes don't always touch all four edges and somer are deformed.

In funnels ellipses are not alway aligned.

The plotted perspective looks good. You have drawn only one panel. But three are expected on one page.

In rough perspective exercise each page should have three panels. Extend your correction lines till the horizon, and stop there – don’t extend them till they intersect, or continue them beyond the horizon. Why are there several disconnected points?

Rotated boxes are good. But boxes could be bigger.

In organic perspective I don't understand the second panel. Lines are not alway parallel. On the second side, all boxes have almost the same size. The far boxes should be more smaller.

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1 page superimposed lines

1 page ghosted lines

1 page rough perspective

1 page organic perspective

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edited at 10:12 PM, Apr 16th 2022
5:06 PM, Friday April 22nd 2022

Hi, I did the exercises again. Here is the link https://imgur.com/a/hgHm8Kf

6:14 PM, Monday April 25th 2022

Your lines are arching. You should draw with shoulder.

Do lesson 1 exercises as 10 - 15 minutes warm ups.

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250 boxes challenge

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