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12:20 PM, Thursday August 26th 2021

Hi, good work on completing Lesson 2. Here are some things I noticed:

Organic Arrows:

I might be wrong, but it looks like your way of constructing the arrows is to draw both sides of the arrow first then draw in the connecting points, which is why one side of your arrow looks smooth while the other is jittery and un-confident.

This is a difficult way of constructing arrows. The first line that determines direction and length of the arrow would be easy, but the second one would be difficult because you would have to manage the foreshortening and rotation of the arrow all at the same time while still trying to keep your lines smooth confident.

Instead, you can try this: Draw the first line as usual, but draw in the connecting lines first before the second side line. This method allows you to determine the foreshortening and rotation of the arrow before you draw the line, allowing you to just focus on constructing the second line with confidence.

Organic Forms with Contour Lines:

Some of your curves look smooth while some are rather jittery. I suspect you are either trying to draw all the curves without rotating the page or you are not spending enough time ghosting them.

Then again, having gone through the pain of struggling with this exercise myself, it could just be that you don't have enough mileage to know how to draw an ellipse with confidence yet. I would recommend doing one ellipse exercise from Lesson 1 as warmup before you start drawing, so that over time you can get more mileage. Ellipses are very important as they are the backbone in many of the following lessons, so don't sleep on them.

Texture Analysis:

Good job here.

Dissections:

Good work with breaking the silhouette. Detail wise, I think you could have simplified it a bit more, especially with the fly wings and Tree mushrooms. But overall I think you understood the point of the exercise so good job.

Form Intersections:

I can see that your lines started out rather wobbly but it seemed you gained more confidence as you progressed. The only shape that still looks wobbly are the spheres, but that's a similar problem to the ellipses. You'll get better as you practice it more. Overall I think you were able to make the different forms look like they belong in the same 3D space, so good job there.

Organic Intersections:

Hmm, I think you felt inclined to fill the page, that's why you continued to add more forms even when the page got overwhelming and didn't know how to make them interact with each other anymore.

You are drawing through your forms, which is good, but you are adding too many contour lines. Here's a tip: Draw the silhouette, and add just enough contour lines until that you are convinced it is a 3D shape. Don't add contour lines for the sake of adding contour lines.

Also from the way some of your forms are interacting with each other, it looks like you don't know how to draw the silhouette such that it would look like one form is slumping over another form. This might be a bit disgusting, but I would suggest googling a picture of a pile of worms and then outlining them digitally. You don't have to use photoshop for this, even ms paint with a mouse would work. You are just doing this to get an understanding of how these softbody forms would interact with each other.

Lastly, you can also try adding a bit of line weight to clarify the bounds of the sausage. Because your line weight is relatively similar, it's very hard to tell what is what. Also, don't feel pressured to fill the entire page. Adding in forms for the sake of filling the page is just going to make the page more confusing without teaching you anything.

To be honest, I hate this exercise as well because of how easy it is to mess it up, but I think you could do with a liiittle bit more practice on drawing organic soft bodies.

Next Steps:

1 page of Organic Intersections.

Just one page, don't feel pressured to fill the whole page though. If you aren't sure how to add any more and the page is only half full, that's good enough.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
12:08 AM, Tuesday September 21st 2021

https://imgur.com/a/6LoJJwm

I've messed up with shadows tho, sorry for the late reply

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