1:52 AM, Saturday April 1st 2023
Hi Mechacatfish, I will be offering some critique for you today.
First off, my major concern is with your line quality, especially in the ellipses constructed around a minor axis. Alot of these lines have a significant amount of wobble and shakiness to them. Every single line you draw in drawabox should be drawn using your shoulder, and the ghosting method. Draw quickly and confidently to make sure it always is straight.
Maybe you never completely grasped how to make straight and confident lines in the first place, or maybe you simply forgot after doing lesson one so long ago, but line confidence is very important. I would recommend re-doing the lesson one material until you straighten those lines out.
Aside from the line quality issue, your ellipses are well executed. You understand how to constructed them well and have a good sense for how they work in 3d space. There is one problem in the error checking method for the ellipses constructed in boxes, though.
In cylinders 167 and onward you forgot to draw the lines at the contact points where the ellipse touches the sides of its enclosing plane that extends towards its vanishing points. These lines serve the purpose of helping students understand how to better create circles that exist accurately in 3d space, and by forgetting them, it undermines the work you've done and the point of the exercise. Without the proper error checking methods, any errors you make in constructing the circles go unnoticed, and it limits the amount of improvement you can make in the exercise.
Because of these concerns I am going to request that you firstly review lesson 1, while taking special care to create confident, smooth lines in every drawing and . After that, I am going to ask for 70 more cylinders constructed in boxes, with all error checking lines included.
Next Steps:
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Re-do lesson one up until the boxes section, and if your lines are still wobbily after that, do the rest of the lesson.
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70 cylinders constructed in boxes, make sure to include all error checking lines and make sure that all your lines are confident and as straight as you can possibly make them.