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11:44 PM, Wednesday March 18th 2020

Hi there again, and no worries! I'm glad I could help!

Good job on the animals, I think you are making good progress, these new ones look way more solid than the others!

Nevertheless, there are still a few issues I can see so I'm going to point them out as best as I can, here we go:

I'm gonna go over each drawing one by one:

Here are the notes I noted on the wolf, I'll go over them one by one, marked 5 numbers on the picture circled so hopefully it's easier to follow.

1. Eyes. When drawing eyes, you tend to use a ellipse to map then down and then jump to the eyes. Never do that. Always follow the steps I wrote on the notes:

1. Cut into the form of the cranium with simple straight lines to clarify how the eye socket is in 3d space. 

2. Add an eyeball, this time drawing through 2 times a sphere. 

3. Now, taking in mind the form of the eyeball, add the eyelids just like I did.

2.Sausage forms

This is something you too repeat over the drawings. For legs, always use sausage forms. Never use flat shapes like you did some times on the elephant or the wolf, always simple sausages, that is, 2 identical balls connected with a tube of consistent width

3.Initial contour line

When starting an animal, you should first draw the mass for the pelvis and the mass for the ribcage, then you shoud join them with a sagged sausage.

After you do that, you need to add an initial contour line , just like I did in orange. When adding adittional forms to the torso, they will have to follow that contour line you drew, as it defines the perspective of the torso.

4.Additional forms and intersections, when adding adittional forms, try to think like in the form intersections exercise; they have to wrap around the forms you are adding them to. This is something that you do way better on the elephant, so I can already see improvent! But try to keep it in mind as you keep doing more of these drawings, approach them more like you did in the elephant.

Intersections Always, in all your drawabox drawings, you should make clear how each form intersect, for example in the part I marked, you didn't draw the intersection between the leg and the paw, so that relationship wasn't clear. You did that as well on the tail, there should have been an intersection between the tail and the body.

5.Drawing through your forms Always too, draw through your forms. In the example I noted you didn't draw through the back leg for example.

The camel feels really solid, good job! The issues I can find on it are only that you didn't draw through your forms, like in the back legs for example, and the use of addittional forms. I noted them all here

And lastly, the elephant, marked here the notes, felt pretty solid in general! again, lots of improvement!

Heads constructions look good in general except that you used an ellipse for the eye socket in some of them.

Next Steps:

I'm seeing a lot of improvement like I said, but I want to see 2 last drawings so I can confirm that you understood what I pointed out. Read closely the notes I wrote and check you are taking in mind each one of the 5 points in each drawing.

You're already doing a good job on additional masses on the elephant, but you can check the donkey demo if you still have doubts.

For the 2 last drawings I want to see a hooved and a non hovel animal, 2 pages.

Keep up the good work and good luck in those last 2 pages!

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
3:03 AM, Friday March 20th 2020

Elodin,

Second round of revisions can be found here. https://imgur.com/a/dfqIDBp

These felt really good. I think the donkey legs can be improved but I was really feeling the raccoon and bear. I never thought I would be able to draw an animal when I started this lesson. I am feeling a ton of positive energy and momentum at the moment.

3:05 AM, Friday March 20th 2020

Elodin,

Second round of revisions can be found here.

https://imgur.com/a/dfqIDBp

These felt really good this time around. I think the donkey legs can be improved on but I correct it in a warmup moving forward. I never thought I would be able to draw an animal at the start of this lesson. I am feeling alot of positive energy and momentum at the moment.

9:16 PM, Saturday March 21st 2020

Hi again, good job! I think those look really solid, nice improvement! I'm marking this as complete, but I'm gonna point out a few issues so you can keep improving.

Here are the notes where I noted all of the stuff I'm going to point out.

First one is to draw intersections between all forms, you've done it in a few, but not all of them, so I pointed out the ones you missed.

Second one is to break down stuff with little boxy forms, for example the paws, I would have break them down like I've shown in the notes I drew. This is because it directly clarifies how they are in 3d space, boxes are very effective for this in general.

Third one is to break down fur detail, and every mark you do in individual strokes, just like we did on lesson 3 leaves when adding detail to the silhouette, instead of doing zigzaging motions, draw each lump on its own, constantly going back to the form you are drawing it over. Nevertheless, I think these attempts are fur are definetely better than your previous ones, good job!

Fourth is lines, which you seem to repeat at times. For example for that eyesocket It seems you repeated the lines twice. Remember that no matter how wrong a line is, don't try to correct it, ghost, do the line, and move on regardless of the result.

Fifth is that the ears are another form, so they have to interact with the head (attach to it) in an intersection which you haven't drawn, so don't forget to draw it in your next drawings.

Overall I think you're doing a pretty good solid job so like I said before I'm marking this as complete, keep in mind the things I said for your next animal drawings or times you come back over this lesson and move on!

Next Steps:

Congratulations on finishing lesson 5! Your next step is the cylinder challenge. I myself am on it, so I won't be able to critique it if you move on faster than me, feel free to post your progress as you do it in the discord and I'll try to help in what I can as well.

Keep up the good work and into the cylinder challenge!

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