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7:05 PM, Saturday June 20th 2020
edited at 7:07 PM, Jun 20th 2020

Arrows

Arrows are a bit wobbly. Keep in mind you should be drawing your lines with confident ghosted motions, just like with all other exercises. A thing to keep in mind is that the arrows should grow as they get towards the viewer, like shown here. You can also add lineweight with superimposed lines to clarify overlaps.

Organic forms

On organic forms, careful with the allignment to the spine of the sausages. Just like in this example ellipses need to be aligned to it.

Another thing is the end of the sausages, yours pinch at times, so don't forget that sausages are just 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width..

The degrees of your sausages aren't changing much as well, keep in mind that even if the sausage is fully straight, the degrees of the ellipses will still shift. Here's an example with a bit exagerated top view and front view that explains this.

Textures

Textures are good, but you're relying on drawing lines a bit. Remember that you should only draw shapes, so start by drawing outlines of a shape, and then filling it, instead of directly copying lines and outlining forms. Focus on drawing cast shadow shapes.

Form intersections

A few things:

-You should still be drawing through all your forms here, so careful with not doing it.

-You've done mostly a good job mantaining consistent foreshortening on the forms, and equilateral forms, but try to have a bit more variety on the orientations of boxes, you've been pretty much drawing the same most of the times.

-Like I said before, most are consistent, but you've got some that are a bit extreme, keep in mind you should mantain consistent foreshortening in all of them, and it's easier if you do it with shallow ones, like you've been doing.

-Intersection lines are a bit wobbly. Just like with other lines, ghost them and draw them confidently. Always confidence > accuracy.

Organic intersections

P good and solid in general, only thing I can catch is that you could be a bit more bold with some shadows, some feel that are sticking to the forms a bit, so careful with that.

Next Steps:

To see if you've understood my points, I wanna see:

1 more page of arrows.

1 page of organic forms with contour lines

1 page of organic forms with ellipses.

Good luck, and keep it up!

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 7:07 PM, Jun 20th 2020
10:31 PM, Saturday June 20th 2020

Thanks, Elodin! You helped me to understand these exercises better.

I have to admit, i failed to really fix my errors in these new pages. Superimposing curves was really hard, i admit i haven't practiced it too much, but now I'm gonna give this more attention. Ellipses and their minor axis are still a struggle for me, but I've tried my best. And I tried my best to maintain the sausage forms proportional but it seems i still need some practice.

Here is the results:

http://imgur.com/gallery/xODo4mT

1:34 PM, Sunday June 21st 2020

Looking good in general, good job!

Arrows flow pretty well, only thing is that you should only add lineweight to the parts of lines that overlap, you don't need to do it to complete lines.

On organic forms, the forms are mostly good, and you've fixed most of the issues, but they still have some. try to overlap more your strokes, both when ghosting and when drawing the line, explained it a bit here.

Next Steps:

Congrats on finishing lesson 2 and good luck with lesson 3!

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