5:08 PM, Monday July 11th 2022
Hi Seanman,
Very well done for all your hard work! I'll critique your work for you and give as much advice as I can :)
Lines
For your super-imposed lines pages, the improvement I would suggest for you to make to your work is to first of all practice more to get those lines more uniform and close together, be sure not to rush, also making sure that your starting points for your lines are very neat, not having lots of different points. Also, try to have a nice bold line when you make your marks, not fearing to put pen to the paper! I'm saying this as some of your lines look a bit too faint, although that may be because your pen is struggling to keep the ink flowing when you make swift marks, which is what you're meant to be doing! I got the pen suggested on this website (linked here https://drawabox.com/recommendations/pigmentliners) it works really well!
Your ghosted lines submission looks like it needs a little more swiftness in the movement, drawing from the shoulder and not the elbow or the wrist. If you do it like this it will make a far straighter line, also make it swift so your brain doesn't kick in too much making the line wobbly. It doesn't matter if the accuracy of the end of the line is not perfect, you need to learn that movement first before attaining accuracy, just make sure you pen is right on that first point that you marked beforehand.
Your ghosted planes are needing similar improvement to the ghosted lines, having straighter lines and taking time to keep an accurate starting point of your lines.
Ellipses
Your table of ellipses and ellipses in planes look very good, make sure to practice getting those ellipses to have as regular shape as possible, meaning to be symmetrical both on the 'x' and 'y' axes. For the ellipses in planes, try to get the ellipses to only touch the planes at the middle point of each side where you have the lines drawn perpendicular to the sides.
I can see for the funnels that you are following the assignment of having the innermost ellipses to be narrower than the outermost ellipses, with the change being gradual for the ellipses between, but for some they look a bit too uniform, I think for improvement it would be good of you to try your best to make that gradient of narrow ellipses to wider ellipses more apparent as this is important for this assignment.
Boxes
Well done with the plotted perspective, again the pen seems like it doesn't give enough ink on some of the lines as they're very faint, so consider a new one. For rough perspective, again try to draw the lines as straight as possible. Super good job on rotated boxes, looks very neat. I can see that one side doesn't come out as much as the others so try to make sure the boxes are the right size to make it more even. I can see on the first panel of the organic perspective pages you were having some trouble with getting the orientation of the box as the lines on each axes were not converging, but I am very pleased at the improvement you made already by the second page, the boxes look so much better so very well done!
Next Steps:
I will mark you as ready to move on, although perhaps practice again with the funnels with the advice I've offered you as I think you could make some improvement on that. You're ready for the 250 box challenge! yay! Do your best, your work with the organic perspectives homework is very promising and I think you'll see very good improvement after completing that challenge.
Very well done!