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2:42 AM, Sunday November 29th 2020

Hello and congrats on completing lesson one. I'll be taking a look at your submission today. Your superimposed lines look okay. You could do a bit of a better job keeping a clearly defined starting point on these. You are for some but not others. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/8/fraying Your ghosted lines and planes turned out well. You are using the ghosting method to good effect to get confident line and while your accuracy isn't quite there yet that will get better with practice.

Your table of ellipses is coming along pretty well. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and going for smooth ellipse shapes for the most part. This is carried over to your ellipse in planes very nicely. Obviously your accuracy could be better but it's good that you are focusing more on smooth consistent ellipse shapes. Accuracy is the end goal but we are building towarsd it with mileage. Your ellipses in funnels are having some issues with tilting off the minor axis that you should probably start considering a little bit more. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/notaligned Your ellipses are off to a good start but there's still room for improvement so keep practicing these during your warmups.

The plotted perspective looks fine although I would like to discuss your hatching a bit. If you are going to add hatching to these exercises you need to start treating it the same as every other line you would draw and never just scribble. Every line we make needs to thought about and considered. Make sure you are ghosting your hatching and then drawing from your shoulder. Your rough perspective boxes turned out okay. You are doing a good job extending the lines back on your boxes to check your work. As you can see some of your perspective estimations were a bit off but that will get better with practice. I'm seeing some wobble returning to some of your lines here and it's likely because you have reverted back to drawing with your wrist sometimes. Always make sure you ghost your lines and draw from your shoulder with confidence. Even on short lines. your wrist should be reserved for detail work only.

Your rotated box exercise was a pretty good attempt. You did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. You didn't quite nail all of your rotations and in some cases you didn't really rotate your boxes at all but simply drew them moving back in perspective like on the right side. Please check the lesson notes here. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/notrotating This was a good attempt at a very difficult exercise though. Try and avoid the scribble hatching like I mentioned earlier. Your organic perspective exercise looks quite good for the most part. You seem to be getting more comfortable using the ghosting method and getting confident linework here which is great. Your box constructions are pretty decent for the most part but I still think the 250 box challenge will be a good next step for you.

Overall this was a pretty good submission with some nice growth in line quality. I think you are understanding most of the concepts these lessons are trying to convey fairly well. I'm going to mark this as complete and good luck with the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

The 250 Box Challenge

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
4:12 AM, Monday November 30th 2020

Thanks a bunch for the critique and your time :)

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