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4:29 PM, Wednesday November 17th 2021

You've definitely made a good bit of progress, and have made a clear effort to apply the points I raised in my previous feedback. Just a couple things to call out:

  • Be sure to draw through all of your freehand ellipses two full times before lifting your pen. I noticed that when drawing the ellipses at the tips of your organic forms with contour curves, you'd usually stop after roughly 1.5 turns of the ellipse, and sometimes less.

  • You're making good headway on sticking to the characteristics of simple sausages. There are still small deviations here and there, but as a whole, good work.

  • The drawings done along with the shrimp and lobster demo have come along well - you've been quite fastidious in following all of the steps closely and carefully.

  • What you learned there and from my previous critique has indeed manifested in how you've approached your own insect constructions - especially the scorpion, which came out really well. I only really noticed a tendency to fall back to adding partial shapes in one kind of area - specifically on some of these insects' mandibles. So if you look at the wasp, you'll notice that the whole mandible structure suddenly stops where it hits the main head structure. Similarly, the ant's mandibles stop suddenly as well, instead of defining the way in which they intersect with the existing structure. Fortunately in just about every other situation, you've handled such things well and have clearly defined the relationships between different forms.

All in all, great work. I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto lesson 5.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
11:10 PM, Thursday November 25th 2021

Great and thank you so much for the critique!

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