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8:01 AM, Friday April 1st 2022

Hello, and thank you for your patience. If it doesn’t already upload them in order, Imgur offers you the opportunity to put them, after you’ve uploaded them; there’s a button on the side that says ‘rearrange images’, or something along those lines. It’s fine for them not to be so in Lesson 1 – there’s not so many of them, after all – but we’d be very grateful if the box challenge submission would be in order. Before we get too ahead of ourselves, however, let’s take a look at this one!

Starting with your superimposed lines, these look great; they’re smooth, properly lined up at the start, and of a consistent trajectory. Your ghosted lines/planes look quite confident, too, and I’m pleased to see that you’ve not forgotten to plot start/end points for the non-diagonal center lines of your planes – most students do. Regarding your end points, however, try not to be as conscious of them. Though this isn’t always the case, I notice that, sometimes, your line will hesitate a little, as it approaches its end point – likely, you’re slowing down, in an effort to not stop short of it, or overshoot, but this is not necessary. Instead, the goal is for the line to be smooth, and straight, so try to prioritize that.

Moving on to your ellipses, the table of ellipses exercise looks great – a lot of confidence on display, here. Perhaps too much, though. See if, at the end of your mark, you don’t flick your pen off the page, but rather lift it. That’ll remove those tails at the end of your ellipses, and have their lines blend together a little more nicely – right now, they give off a slightly ‘wild’ aura, which is not what we’re aiming for what with our patient, considerate ghosting. The ellipses in the ellipses in planes exercise look mostly good, though I’d perhaps ghost them a little longer. Not to fix the accuracy issues – it’s fine to have those – but rather the issues of roundness (your ellipses are a little bumpy). Still, even like this, they’re perfectly acceptable, and bound to improve. The funnels exercise looks great. Do try, however, to have every ellipse have a goal. Those on the edges, for instance (the ones without a minor axis), aren’t aligned to anything. Recall that an ellipse without a goal isn’t of much use to us.

The plotted perspective exercise is well done.

The rough perspective exercise, too, starts off strong, and shows some nice improvement throughout the set. Do try to resist the urge, however, to reinforce your lines. In other words, if a line comes out wrong, don’t correct it in a separate stroke, but rather just leave it – it’s fine as is, and more ink is more likely to just make this even more messy, than anything else.

There’s a similar thing going on in your rotated boxes exercise, too, though there’s no issues with it beyond that. It’s big, its boxes are snug, and properly rotating. This is the case in the back, too, though to a lesser extent (some of your boxes there are a little flat). That’s no cause for concern, however – as we progress through the box challenge, and knowledge replaces instinct, you’ll be able to see some improvement in those instances, too, so hold out until then.

Speaking of holding out (or, rather, not…), the last few pages – the organic perspective exercise, in other words – feel a little rushed. I wonder if this is because you were eager to finish, or if it just simply feels that way, because your lines here are missing start/end points. Remember that all lines need those, especially our lines here, seeing how they need to not only head in a specific direction, but also be a specific length. Where possible, we like to split complicated tasks into smaller, manageable ones, but even beyond that, we like to exhibit forethought, and planning, in our linework, and the ghosted method is what lets us do that. Still, despite that, your boxes are well done.

Next Steps:

I’ll be marking this lesson as complete, and moving you on to the box challenge. Good luck!

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
11:10 PM, Tuesday April 5th 2022

Ok, thank you very much for your critique. I will try to keep all of those points in mind.

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