Hi, I have finished lesson 2 recently, and feel like am ready for a critique.
This lesson was way harder than the previous lesson and challenge, so much so that I think I didn't understand it well enough (Especially 3D arrows).
Critiques are very appreciated (and many thanks if you do so).
First of all you arrows are good, you could have used more lineweight and hatching on the twisting parts, to try to convey more convincingly the sense of 3D.
On your textures I notice that your sausages have swellings on some ends, try to improve that the same goes for the sausages on the contour lines and contour curves exercises.
And now regarding the textures themselves, I can still see the black rectangle on the texture analysis exercises, don't be afraid to fill more space with black ink as it is really lacking.
Now on your dissections, keep foreshortening at a minimal, and bring your forms closer together, remember that the lines that represent where objects intersect run on the surfaces of both objects.
Next Steps:
I'm going to ask for certain revisions as I see some areas of improvement.
The contour lines and curves exercises, some of your sausages swell at the ends, and don't use more contour lines that you need to, a few well placed ones will do just as well.
And the organic forms, this has to do with the shading, it is just as important as the sausages and seems that you forgot it, you have to use it to really reinforce the sense of 3D, don't hesitate to make long shadows and fill places with more ink.
To do the mentioned exercises all over again, don't have to be perfect, but you can definitely improve
So edit them into the same Imgur page? or make a new submission?
Hi, this is the Lesson 2 redo.
(sorry it took too long, was kinda busy these days)
You definitely improved your sausages, but I recommend you keep practicing them so that they can be better, but for the moment it is enough.
And the organic dissections are better too, feel more solid than the previous ones.
Next Steps:
You can move on to lesson 3, good job.
Thank you very much for the critique.
I appreciate it a
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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