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1:53 PM, Monday October 19th 2020

You might not have done enough arching lines, but you for sure have enough very long lines And thise look very clean. Nicely always starting at the same point and not fraying to much at the end.

On your ghosted lines you are consistently too short, but they seem to always be close to your end point. I'd be happy with those.

Your elipses often leave out some white space, that could've been filled with a larger elipse. But they generally hit the boundry boxes quite nicely.

Except for some elipses not hitting the boundry I really like how your elipses in planes look. The planes itself are great, but you also had very nice ghosted lines, so that's no surprise :)

Your funnels all look very similar, not much variation in the minor axis. Might train that a bit more. And more so than with the elipses in planes you undershot your elipses here more than undershoot. The top in the middle and the bottom right one you have your minor axis sliding up the elipse instead of having them in the middle. In general I think you could've squeezed some more funnels on the page.

plotted perspective looks sooo nice. I really like how you varied the line thickness to make the boxes stand out nicely.

With your rough perspective there is a huge jump in skill from the first to the second page. So you nicely have seen your mistakes and fixed them later on. Nice. One thing is that your lines are a bit wobbly, I assume you slowed down quite a bit here compared to the other exercises, so try to get those as straight as with your ghosted lines.

Your rotated boxes are awesome. And they stay square and don't turn into rectangles too much.

I'm jealous of your organic perspective boxes. They flow nicely, change in size, rotate clearly and even overlap.

In total I think you nailed it :) See you in lesson 2.

I'd be happy about a critique myself if you have the time. I just posted my own lesson 1 stuff :)

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Maybe work on the funnels a bit more? But not sure since we should not grind the exercises. I'd say just continue with the next lesson.

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1:42 PM, Tuesday October 20th 2020

Thank you for your feedback. I'll surely check yours.

2:51 PM, Tuesday November 17th 2020

Hello,

I agree with previous critique. Overall, your submission is pretty good. I'll go to mark "agree".

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