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6:08 PM, Thursday December 15th 2022

Hello I’ll be handling the critique for your lesson 3 homework.

Organic Arrows :

-Starting with the organic arrows you are doing some good attempts at the perspective of the ribbon and you’ve also drawn your marks with confidence. It seems that you are both aware of how the arrow gets wider as it moves closer to the viewer, and the fact that the negative space between the zigzagging sections of the ribbon decreases as it moves further away. I don’t really have anything to call out here but keep aware of the negative space let’s move on to the next section.

by the way u did nice job better than me

Leaves :

-Moving on to the leaves you are doing a good job with the first two steps, that is drawing the flow line and the edges for the silhouette. and one important step and that is drawing the edge details,

Branches :

good forking by the way

-Moving on to the branches I think that you may have not followed the instructions as best as you could have.

First of all remember that you should extend each segment fully halfway to the next ellipse. RIght now it seems that you are drawing each edge of the branch in one go rather than dividing it into segments. This causes you to have some gaps where the edges are not touching the ellipses. try to use ghosting method with that and when feel confidance draw that stroke when its halfway to next ellipse

Once you’ve drawn those edges you can use them as a sort of a “runway” to guide your next stroke, by overlapping them a good bit, this will ehlp ou to achieve a smoother transition. Here is a diagram that illustrates these past two points https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/18463269.png .

and it appears u draw single stroke to overlap which is not match with continous principle from lesson 1

and u have Mistake: Visible tails in a compound stroke back again to the lesson and read that

these mistakes i did them all and if u read he was expecting that

daisy demo :

u did nice job but the leaves need more work some are not closed well and u over use the strokes on each leaf and looks like mess they are drawing without good observation and randomly and

u should take time breack ref and observe and make construction from simple to complex so try to take breaks and interpret each shape as thubnails maybe u dont need to make whole drawing again focus on interpratinng one shape on say 3 thumbnails then u can move to interpreat another shape without repeating confidance drawen shapes

https://discord.com/channels/365036548820959242/368871209926131712/1043351694370689075 see this also a i know leaves can be hard i redo all these lesson 3 times but ur attempt is good

good job wit focal point here

hisbiscus :

need more confidance wit leaves and the stamen i guess it name on ellipese is off

mushroom is okay

sunflower try to make the two branch of two leaves connected to the main one not look like in the air

holly :

again need nore construction drawing for the fruit and the leaf look kind of in the air so try to think like xray and come with construction line to feel solid

golden pothos :

need more work on leaves here the flow line and the closing i would recommend watching john muir laws leaves lessons

rhododrdron :

u need to work on focal point to make the eye flow from dense to sparse i like the job u did just flow line leaves need to extend more and work with focalpoint and not push all shadows to not be mess

jade :

great job with shapes nice use of contours

the top part lead arrangment need more observation and match with good arrangment i like your job here also try to consider how each line will add to your drawing i would love to see more confidance lines and not to be single part with some mess like the last part and the middle of the branch they should not be there to make drawing solid

Next Steps:

i need to see 1 more page of branches

and two construction plant drawing maybe the daisy and pothos

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9:18 PM, Tuesday January 24th 2023

Sorry for the very late response, it's been more than a month and I'm still not done with these so I think I'll just submit what I've finished for now. I did a page of branches and the daisy demo.

https://imgur.com/a/mgWw3YX

4:25 PM, Wednesday January 25th 2023

Just finished the golden pothos revision so I added that to the folder too.

8:44 AM, Friday January 27th 2023

hi you have done good job with branches but keep in mind what i said before

daisy demo u still not enclosed the leaf and some lines are wobbly and not drawn with confidant but overall its good just keep in mind what i said i see u forgot but its better than the first one

pothos the lines need more confidant as i see some wobble lines u need to close the leaf also here to the flow line i would recommand to observe ref and draw many times as u need to breack and solve each proplem noo need to interpret again what u solved just to have confidance so i need to see also one plant with leaf

Next Steps:

1 page od plant with leaf

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