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1:53 AM, Saturday March 30th 2024

Hello! I'm Kort3 and I'll be critiquing your work today. Before starting, with great regret, I tell you that I will not be able to give you the job as good, since the exercises on rotated boxes and organic perspective are missing. I will still criticize what you have, but if you want me to give you the thumbs up you will have to reply to this message with a link to the exercises. Now, let's get started!

Lines

Overlapping lines: Many of your overlapping lines are frayed on both sides, this means that you may not be paying enough attention to the placement of the pen.

However, your lines do not wobble in most cases, which means that you perform the stroke safely, which is much more important, you just have to pay a little more attention in your next exercises.

Ghost lines:

In this exercise you can see some wobble in the lines, but beyond normal, you're doing fine!

I take this opportunity to leave you a couple of links to explanations that I think will be very useful for you to review to do your last two exercises.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/superimposedlines/wobbling

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/superimposedlines/fraying

Phantom plans:

Overall, solid shots, that's all I can say.

Ellipses:

Tables of ellipses: on the first page, some ellipses are only reviewed once, but it can be seen that later you realized your mistake and corrected it, very good! Even so, be careful not to do too many repetitions, as there are some that you have reviewed up to 4 times. Further than that, I don't see many "floating" ellipses, they tend to be connected to edges, so that's good.

Ellipses in planes: I see you trying to place them comfortably against all the edges and feel confident, however, it happens to you like in the previous exercise and you go over the ellipses too many times, which means that you are not following the rules as they are.

But don't worry too much because remember, a sure but inaccurate line > Accurate but wobbly line.

Funnels: Good funnels. Try varying the size and shape of the ellipses during warm-ups, and optionally change the degree with each ellipse.

Boxes

Perspective drawn: nothing to add here.

Approximate perspective: Solid boxes!

I hope my review is useful to you and having said all this, I await your response with the exercises you are missing.

Additionally, I would like you to repeat an elipses on planes sheet to make sure that you only go over the ellipse 2 or 3 times at most, always making sure to use the ghost method in each of the lines you make.

Good luck mate!!

Next Steps:

Remake 1 sheet of elipses in planes and finish your homework :)

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
7:55 PM, Monday April 1st 2024

Hi Kort3!

Thank you for the feedback, I think the fraying on my overlapping lines may be because I kept swapping from right to left and left to right in direct (gotta love being a lefty whose instincts say keep hand off wet ink and years of writing say go left to right), but I'm working on staying consistent with my direction.

Really sorry about the missing exercises, could have sworn I'd added them onto the imgur album with the others, but must have missed it.

Hopefully the missing exercises and the extra ghost plane ellipses are in the attached link :) (fingers crossed!)

https://imgur.com/a/BzduGcb

12:19 AM, Tuesday April 2nd 2024

Hi Novaquaide!

Your elipses in planes and organic perspective are great, good job!!

In all case, I must demand you again to complete your rotated boxes exercise, you haven't draw the 3 corner boxes that correspond to each side. You're on the right way, but must put more attention into the instructions, keep going!!

Here you have an example of what I'm talking about:

https://imgur.com/a/9bePsCO

And here I leave you a link explaining the exercise in video.

https://youtu.be/Oz98L4Fyxoo

Here other links explaining the whole exercise:

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/rotatedboxes/step1

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/rotatedboxes/step3

Next Steps:

Finish the rotated boxes exercise

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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