Hello Jojo, this is Canoe from the discord server. I’d be happy to take a look at your lesson 6 submission.

Starting with your form intersections exercise, for the most part they look alright. Mostly it looks likw you struggle with the intersections of the round forms like spheres and cylinders. For example, the cylinder intersection on the bottom right of your first page, the come intersection on the bottom right of your second page, and the cylinder intersection on the top left of your third page. There’s also in instance where a cone clearly pokes into a box on the bottom right of your third page that you didn’t mark as in intersection. If you need an example, feel free to write in the lesson 6 channel and I’ll see what I can do about giving you something more concrete. For now, though, I think your understanding of this exercise is sufficient.

Moving onto the real focus of this lesson, I’m happy to say that your understanding of how to construct objects has really developed over time. I’ll use the rest of this critique to talk about some of the things to keep an eye on for the upcoming lesson 7 and 25 wheel challenge, as well as highlight some of the things you’ve done well.

One things I would really like to see you implement going forward is an increased precision in your orthographic studies. For the first six objects, you often seemed to place features like buttons, curves, and indents based off of observation. This is fine for lessons 3 through 5 because organic forms generally don’t conform to any specific design. However, when dealing with man made objects, they’re often manufactured en masse in a way that each item will be exactly the same as the last one. That means we need to be exactly as precise when constructing these objects. What I mean by this is that each feature should be placed with a specific subdivision. There’s a great example of this here in the discord: https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/368871313231708172/1364641711904526579/PXL_20250422_1953044822.jpg?ex=68d02a21&is=68ced8a1&hm=eb140dced19d16a689c891190672028aaec7f62ca56125febbc6b77cc8843129&

Doing so helps offload the tricky bits of thinking about where these features go in the final construction, because they're based off of objective subdivisions, and leave our brains free to process how the object actually occupies 3d space. This will be especially important for lesson 7, so it's best to hammer it home here.

Second thing to look out for is faming your cylinders in boxes like you did for the last 100 cylinders in the 250 cylinder challenge. This applies to every cylinder you would include in your object, even if the object itself isn’t mostly a cylinder. For example, the camera lens for your third object could have been constructed within a box to help you place it and get its degree relative to the rest of the camera consistent. You can apply this practice to lenses, buttons, holes, and anything roughly cylindrical. This can also include wheels and headlights later on for the cars.

The final thing I would like you to look out for, and this is definitely something that you improved on over the course of your lesson, is to try and use your bounding box more efficiently. For example, your fourth object had a lot of unnecessary space for your bounding box. This is admittedly something that isn’t too big of an issue, especially since lesson 7 so heavily uses proportioning along with orthographic studies (you’ll see what I mean when you get there). However, efficiently using your bounding box does reflect better preparation on your part and overall really forces you to consider every mark you’ll be making for your constructions.

So to summarize, I’d like you to be more specific with your orthographic studies and their use of subdivisions, frame your cylinders in boxes, and cut the unnecessary sections of your bounding box.

Overall though, like I stated in the beginning of this critique, I believe that the last two objects show enough understanding of how objects are constructed that you’re ready to take on the cars in lesson 7. Keep these tips in mind, as well as any tips you may have gathered from the discord server, and you’ll be alright. Of course, if you have any questions, please feel free to write them in #lesson6 and I’ll get back to you in more detail.

So congratulations! Before moving onto the cars, you must first tackle to great cylinders upon which they stand.