7:06 PM, Monday March 1st 2021
That's a nice attempt at the exercise there. Before i start sounding like I hated this submission,I'll have to tell you that your work in all the exercises is much better than the average except for the ellipses. I would have given you the greenlight to progress on if you hadn't done the funnels the way you did ie with not drawing through the ellipses twice. I see you've attempted it 4 times though, which makes me feel a bit bitter about saying this, but it is still important that you've drawn through every ellipse twice. The process just improves your confidence at drawing one so much more. Before i get into the actual critique, ill put it right here that I want one page of funnels in which it is fixed.
Anyway
Here's the detailed critique:
Super imposed lines: nicely done. You started out with wobbly lines but the wobble reduced significantly by the end of the exercise. So good work with that. There is fraying on both ends though which is something you skimped out on
Ghosted lines and planes: There are a few curvy and wobbly lines here but that's to be expected. You have significantly improved on the straightness of your lines by the second time you attempted the planes for the ellipses. The straight lines were straighter but the ones that weren't remained the same. You can easily do much better. What you have here is just your nerves getting the better of you. Give yourself time while ghosting each line. Your nerves will gradually start behaving as you want them to.
Ellipses: I am going to leave general pointers for what went wrong with your ellipses here. You seem to get what they are for but the ellipses themselves are pretty wobbly I must say. What I recommend you to do for better ellipses is to ghost a bit faster, that way the wobble just gets flattened out. You will have terrible ellipses at first, because you arent used to the speed. Think of it not much more than scribbling circularly if it helps you get over the fear of making a bad ellipse. Once you've got scribbly ellipses, try working on tightnening the curves up so that the multiple times you've gone through them kinda start merging into one. You'll get better at it with practice, slowly but surely. About the funnels, I'll have to say there's a lot done right here, you have the setup done perfectly which if isnt the case, works against your ability to do the funnels properly. You generally have the accuracy done ok, just that you need to build confidence and for that youll have to keep practicing these exercises
Boxes: Almost perfectly done i must say. In rough perspective you do have wobbly lines though, like everyone who does it yhe first time. You are jist getting overwhelmed by the idea of drawing a box, take some time and give proper care to ghost each line nicely before putting it down. Apart from this, the rotated boxes are done well , really well, apart from the distance between boxes increasing too much on the right end. For the organic perspectice, I dont have much to say, can't really find flaws in it
Yeah, that's about it.
Do reply with a page of the funnels with the ellipses drawn through twice before moving onwards
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