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9:13 PM, Wednesday October 5th 2022

Hi there, I'll be handling your box challenge critique.

When submitting you'll be prompted to check that you have all your pages, it's just to make sure you have them all rather than allowing you to submit in parts so no worries, you were correct by assuming you had to submit them all at once.

Not only does the challenge help deepen your understanding of important concepts but it shows your desire to learn as well. That being said I'll try to keep this critique fairly brief so you can get working on the next steps as soon as possible.

Things you did well:

  • Good work drawing your construction lines confidently, this keeps your lines smooth and prevents wobbling.

  • When hatching you're taking the time to space each line evenly which shows that care and thought is being put into each line. This helps your boxes appear solid and tidy rather than rushed.

  • You're doing a great job of experimenting with orientations, and proportions. Experimenting is an important habit to build when learning any new skill, it helps form a more well rounded understanding. I hope you'll continue to display and nurture this habit in the future.

Things you can work on:

  • Line weight isn't a requirement of the challenge but I do recommend practicing it in your future attempts. It's an incredibly useful tool but one that people often require a fair bit of mileage before they feel comfortable applying it. The sooner you start to build up that mileage the sooner you'll see better results.

  • I'd like you to experiment with rates of foreshortening more. Currently you tend to keep your lines close to parallel and push your vanishing points far from your boxes. Try bringing your points in closer so that your lines have to converge more dramatically. Remember that experimentation is important.

  • There are times when your lines converge in pairs or you attempt to keep your lines a bit too parallel which results in them diverging. This is an example of lines converging in pairs, and this shows the relation between each line in a set and their respective vanishing point. The inner pair of lines will be quite similar unless the box gets quite long and the outer pair can vary a lot depending on the location of the vanishing point. Move it further away and the lines become closer to parallel while moving it closer increases the rate of foreshortening.

The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.

I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds off concepts in the previous course material so if you move forward with un-addressed issues you end up just creating further issues on top of them.

I'd like you to draw 20 more boxes please. Focus on expeirmenting with different rates of foreshortening.

Once you've completed your boxes reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready I'll move you on to the next lesson.

I know you can do this and look forward to seeing your work.

Next Steps:

20 more boxes please.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
11:10 PM, Wednesday January 4th 2023

Hi Tofu, happy new year!

Thank you for your in depth feedback and my apologies for my extremely late response. Things have been busy and I haven't been planning accordingly.

I'm still determined to finish this and improving my drawing skills, so here is to new year resolutions!

Here is a link to the additional 20 boxes: https://flic.kr/p/2o9MsdB

I have to say I found it difficult to get the foreshortening right, as well as getting the lines right so that they don't converge in pairs or diverge. I hope I got it right or done better this time, please let me know. I alos attempted to make the lines even thicker (more so then last time) and I hope it is noticeable.

Looking forward to hearing from you!

9:46 PM, Thursday January 5th 2023

Welcome back.

You're managing to bring one vanishing point in closer but your other 2 sets often still end up overly parallel/diverging.

I'm going to be asking you to draw an additional 20 boxes but these will be a bit different. For the first 10 I'd like you to draw your vanishing points explicitly on the page after you've created your starting Y shape, this will force you to keep these vanishing points in mind while constructing the rest of your box. The last 10 boxes will be constructed using the original method where you're keeping vanishing points in mind but not explicitly drawing them, hopefully having been forced to work with these points closer and seeing how all 3 sets of lines converge more dramatically will make it easier to do with the intended method.

If you have any questions before getting started feel free to ask, otherwise I look forward to seeing your future boxes.

Next Steps:

20 more boxes. (10 with explict vanishing points drawn, 10 without)

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
5:11 PM, Thursday January 12th 2023

Tofu,

Thank you for this exercise, it finally clicked in my head how this works.

Here is the link for the new boxes: https://flic.kr/s/aHBqjAnYKD

I'm looking forward to hear your feedback.

Cheers,

Lem

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