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7:28 AM, Monday November 21st 2022

It’s no problem, ahah (and my condolences!)

Starting with your superimposed lines, these are well done. They’re smooth, properly lined up at the start, and of a consistent trajectory. I’d have liked to see a few of them reach the recommended ‘full page width’, but that’s alright – what’s here is good. Aaand, I scrolled down, and found a super secret 3rd page of superimposed lines, where they are a bit longer. Disregard! The ghosted lines/planes look fairly solid, save for 2 things. First, your start/end points are a little large. Remember that a perfect line is meant to swallow them both. Secondly, your lines tend to hesitate as they approach them, as if you’re slowing down in an attempt to not overshoot, and wobbling, as a result. Try not to, if that is indeed what’s happening – the goal isn’t for our lines to be accurate, but rather for them to be confident. It makes no sense to sacrifice the latter for the former.

Moving on to the ellipse section, the table of ellipses exercise is mostly good. Your ellipses are smooth, rounded, and properly drawn through, but struggle with spacing, and are sometimes a little hairy. Regarding the first problem, see if you can ghost a tiny bit longer, with greater emphasis on their position with reference to their frame and neighbors (but not so much so that it hampers their confidence). As for the latter, simply remember that we recommend rotating around your ellipses 2-3 times; no more, no less, with a recommendation on the lesser – that way, your mistakes are much easier to spot. Your planes are a little simplistic – and thus, don’t lead to especially ambitious ellipses – but what’s here is well done. The funnels, too, are well done. Save for that one where the minor axis is entirely off, I mean. For that, I’ll recommend drawing the arcing lines first, and then adding the axis, so as to ensure that it’s equidistant.

The plotted perspective exercise looks… needlessly hairy, considering it’s drawn using a ruler, but the lines themselves are correct.

The rough perspective exercise looks the same, and it’s at this point that I’ll request that you be a little more deliberate about your movements, such that your pen doesn’t accidentally touch the page as you ghost. As for the rest of it, though – this is to say, the convergences – the exercise starts off strong, and shows some nice improvement throughout the set.

The rotated boxes exercise is well done. It’s big (though I’d have liked it to be even bigger!), and its boxes are nice and snug. Rotation is, as expected, a little subtle, and you do sometimes forget about the occasional line (some of the boxes aren’t drawn through in the back, for instance), but an attempt seems to have been made, so I’ll count it. It’ll get better as you progress through the box challenge, anyway.

The organic perspective exercise is the only one I wish wasn’t blurry, so I could confirm that you’re plotting start/end points for all of your lines, as you should be (the hint of overshooting causes me to think that you’re not), but I’ll rely on your honesty not being, I think~ As such, should that be the case, do be sure to plot some, from now on. Otherwise, nice work – the boxes, though a little dramatic in their foreshortening, flow well, as a result of their size.

Next Steps:

I’ll be marking this lesson as complete, and sending you off to the box challenge. Off with you! And good luck!

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5:45 PM, Monday November 21st 2022

Hello thank you for the thoughtful criticism! it was just what ive been needing im surprised with how quick it was given too!

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