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12:49 PM, Monday October 4th 2021

Hey there! I will be reviewing your homework today. Congrats on making it through Lesson 2 and let's go!

Arrows

You tried out a bunch of forms and showcased the perspective well. The end is smaller, growing bigger towards the arrowhead. Good job! Your lines tend to wobble in most of your arrows. In addition I noticed you tried repeating or drawing over mistakes here and there. Remember to always ghost your lines before drawing them in one confident stroke. No wobbling or lifting the pen of the paper before you reached the end of the line!

Organic Forms

Same goes here for the lines. If you feel like the sausage form is to difficult to execute, you can either ghost it as well or place dots where it's supposed to go, ghost those and then place the line.

Your ellipses have a nice degree and angle. I might be wrong but it seems to me that you drew over them more than three times. 2 times would be best, three is the maximum.

I can definitely see the hooks in the forms with contour lines. I think you can go a little bit further still with those to make sure you really drive the point home!

Your forms go into the right directions. Due to the sometimes wobbly lines the forms seem to look a bit pinched, bloated or stretched though. Remember it's a simple sausage form. Two spheres, connected by a tube!

https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/simplesausage

Texture

As far as I can see you definitely concentrated on the cast shadows. You can try and go into more detail the next time around. I think that might really help you out understand the texture of the object you're looking at. The gradient on the second one turned out really good. Keep looking at that one for reference in the next lessons! For the other two you can see the black bar on the left side clearly, which is not supposed to be. It's a learning process but I'm sure you're on the right path!

Dissections

You wrapped the textures around the forms nicely. In addition you broke the silhouette, making the whole thing look much neater, it looks great! I don't know what happened on the first page but it seems you completely forgot to draw in cast shadows only, and instead only drew lines, which is the opposite of what you were supposed to do. You picked it back up on the second page though. Your cast shadows still seem a bit lined but it's way better than the first page. Just to be sure I'll link this tip by Uncomfortable anyway: https://i.imgur.com/M9JJfr4.png

Form Intersections

All the forms seem to be in the same space, intersecting with each other, which was the most important part of the assignment. So I think you got the most important thing.

There are a few minor things needing to be addressed still. Nothing big though.

For cylinders, you should first draw the minor axis, and then draw the first ellipse, while making sure the minor axis divides the upper and lower part evenly. Here's another tip by Uncomfortable: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/a24c7c51.jpg

I noticed you didn't add any pyramids. While it's not a must, it will help you understand different forms in the 3 Dimensional space if you do include them from time to time.

Organic Intersections

You got a good amount of shapes interacting with each other here. You drew through all of them and over the course of the exercise I think they grew to feel more solid and in space. You're doing good work on the shadows as well. Be aware of floating shapes though. These forms sit in 3D space and are heavy, at no point are they light or stiff enough to be able to float in the air. Even though your shadows definitely go into the right directions, sometimes you seem to forget to add them or they're falling onto a shape wrong. Remember they're cast shadows, following the forms they're falling onto.

In addition, don't be afraid to draw larger shapes on the 'floor'. As long as you have a connected shape, there won't be a single dot as shadow on the floor. Feel free to check other student's completed homework for reference!

Even though there were mistakes and issues here and there, I think you did a good job overall. Mistakes are bound to happen so don't worry too much about those. Double down on them to make sure you understand the intentions behind the assignments.

To make sure you really get what this lesson is about I'm gonna add a bit of revisions. Make sure to go through them and answer with them to this post when you've completed them. Good luck, have fun!

  • 1 page of the Arrow Exercise

  • 1 page of the Organic Forms with Contour Lines (the curves only)

Next Steps:

  • 1 page of the Arrow Exercise

  • 1 page of the Organic Forms with Contour Lines (the curves only)

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
3:29 PM, Monday October 4th 2021

Thank you very much for your reply. These criticisms helped me a lot. I will correct my attitude and take every lesson seriously. I have now completed the modification. Although it seems a little insufficient, I don’t know how to add pictures in the reply and put it here "https://imgur.com/a/BXv48rN" Thank you

10:00 AM, Tuesday October 5th 2021

Heya, I'm glad I was able to help you! Putting the pictures here like this is perfect. I already see your improvement, keep it up!

Great job, you're definitely fit for the next lesson. Good luck! :D

Next Steps:

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