Hi Triforceslash,
I'll be doing your critique today! I will split it into three sections:
LINES
Your superimposed lines are nicely done! You've ensured that you start from the same point and drawn a line without any wobble. We value confidence over accuracy so nicely done here.
Your ghosted lines are looking good! You've marked the start and end points and drawn confident strokes between each making sure not to overlap! Very good!
Your ghosted planes are of the same quality as the previous exercises so good job! I see a little wobble in some of the strokes so make sure you ghost and take your time in that. Once ready, mark the paper with a confident stroke. Taking the exercise as a whole though, you've done well here!
ELLIPSES
The table of ellipses looks fine. There is a little overlapping over the borders but it's not too much of an issue to the point where it's actually a problem. Please make sure to keep in mind they they should not overlap the boundaries of the box when you do this exercise during your warm-ups. However, majority of the time you've kept in mind that the ellipses should be touching without any distance from each other so good job there.
Regarding your ellipses in planes, you've done well with ghosting and drawing over the ellipse 2 times. There is no wobble so good job here! One thing I do want to point out though is that some of your ellipses don't touch all 4 edges of a plane correctly. See how the ellipse sits in the plane here, https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/13/step2. Notice how the ellipse touches each of the 4 SIDES of it. Some of your ellipses have been drawn in such a way that it only touches two CORNERS of the plane instead of the EDGES. For example, have a look at the 1st page-last row-middle plane. Your ellipse mainly touches the top right and bottom left corner of the pane. I hope this makes sense. Let me know if this doesn't and I'll try to explain it better.
Your funnels look splendid! You've nicely filled each funnel where the ellipses are touching the borders of the funnel accurately. Good job here! In addition, the main important point of having the minor axis cutting the two halves of each ellipse symmetrically is nicely done here. The only thing I want to point out here is that each of your ellipses are of the same width in the funnel. Have a look at https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/step3 and notice how the ellipses in the middle are 'thinner' than the ellipses at the edge of the funnel. Keep this in mind when doing this exercise for your warm ups.
BOXES
Your plotted perspective looks fine. All good here!
Your rough perspective looks good too. There is a little wobble to your lines though so make sure to take your time to ghost. This will greatly reduce the wobble in your lines. One long confident stroke is all that's needed and ghosting will ensure you do this! Otherwise, nicely done here. You've correctly drawn your line corrections to the horizon and not the VP. Good job!
Your rotated boxes look good! You have good spacial awareness and have kept a consistent distance between each box while retaining the dimensions of the box in perspective. Nicely done. I see a little wobble in some of the lines here too so keep in mind what I said above and how to handle it.
Nicely done on the organic boxes too! You've kept a sense of rotation as well as perspective in these exercises so good job! One thing I want to point out here is that when you add lineweight, it should be only to the overlapping lines. For example, the biggest box in the last row of the first page doesn't need that line weight at all as it doesn't overlap any of the boxes behind it. Remember when adding lineweight, you must use the ghosting method as well and (in case the line is crooked) don't try to correct it by drawing over it multiple times. I see this a few times of you having drawn multiple strokes to show lineweight.
All in all, well done on completing the lesson. You've done well!! I hope you're proud as you've done really well here! :)
Just a few things I want you to before I mark this lesson as complete.
Next Steps:
Please do another page of Ellipses in Planes and Funnels keeping in mind what I've stated above. Thanks!
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