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6:25 AM, Sunday February 28th 2021

Hi there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.

You're making good progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson, below I'll be listing some things that will hopefully help you in your future attempts at these exercises.

  • Your arrows are off to a good start, they're flowing pretty consistently in terms of their width. Just have two quick notes for you here, your lines do wobble a bit which is a sign you may not be drawing as confidently as you could be. I'd also like you to experiment more with foreshortening. By utilizing foreshortening in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as you can see demonstrated here.

  • You're close to keeping your organic forms with contours simple, but do get a bit complex at times. Our goal in this exercise is to create forms where both ends are the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the form's length as discussed here. Other than that a few of your contours get a bit stiff, you should only draw the ellipse on the end facing the viewer and I'd like you try to shift the degree of your contours a bit more. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

  • In the texture exercises (more so in the dissections) you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here. I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.

  • If you feel like you don't fully grasp form intersections just yet don't worry, you're on the right track but right now this exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page. We'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. Your forms here appear solid and like they belong in a single cohesive 3D space, good work.

  • Your organic intersections are looking well done, you're showing that your sense of 3D space is developing by wrapping your forms around one another believably. You're doing a good job pushing your shadows so that they're not just hugging the form creating them as well. My only criticisms here are your lines are a bit messy and wobbly and that some of your forms could be simpler.

Overall this was a pretty solid submission, you have a few things to work on but I believe you can improve these areas with more mileage by practicing them in your warm ups. I'll be moving you on to the next lesson and marking your submission complete.

Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups and good luck in lesson 3!

Next Steps:

Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups.

Move on to lesson 3.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:09 PM, Sunday February 28th 2021

Thanks for the feedback! Really appreciate the example images you've included, they definitely reinforce some of the points I missed when reading through the original lesson.

11:57 PM, Thursday April 1st 2021

Hello, I was trying to submit my Lesson 3 attempt when I realized that I haven't been marked complete for Lesson 2 yet. Please let me know if I should go back to some Lesson 2 exercises or if I'm cleared to submit Lesson 3.

Thanks!

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