Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes

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4:44 PM, Sunday June 20th 2021

Hello ASPECIALRAPTOR

I see that you already moved forward and finished lesson 3, and I am guessing your skills have improved as well. That's why I am not sure if this critique will be helpful or not, but since the critique system is there to help us see what we missed, I will only look at this homework and review it as if you are still in Lesson 1.

Superimposed Lines:

The short lines look good, but I see frayings on both ends as the lines got longer, so maybe you might want to take your time and place your pen carefully before drawing. It is good that you tried curved lines, but they look a bit wobbly. Don't forget to draw your lines fast and without thinking so that they will appear confident.

Ghosted Lines:

There is arching in your lines. You can fix this habit by trying to arc your line in the opposite direction that you tend to arch normally. Also ghosting more than you usually do might help with confidence and accuracy. I see that in some of your lines, you try to be accurate, but this prevents you draw confidently. Our priority is always confidence. Accuracy comes second.

Ghosted Planes:

This part is almost the same as the previous exercise. Only you might get caught in the process of drawing the shapes; you might forget to plan each of your lines. There are some wobbly lines that look like they are drawn without ghosting.

Tables of Ellipses:

Your ellipses don't look confident. They are wobbly and stiff. Try not to care about accuracy too much. Ghost your ellipses enough and then draw them fast and confidently. It is good that you go over your ellipses at least two times but try to be more confident with them.

Ellipses on Planes:

This part is similar to the previous exercise. Try not to focus too much on accuracy. Even though the ellipse doesn't sit perfectly in the plane, as long as you draw a smooth ellipse, it is a success.

Funnels:

I liked how you aligned your ellipses with the minor axis. But I think you could draw more ellipses. For example, one of them has only three ellipses. There is a confidence issue here as well. So try to ghost more and draw fast.

Rough Perspective:

You seemed to understand the one-point perspective and how the lines behave. Horizontal lines are parallel and vertical lines perpendicular to the horizon. And the depth lines converge toward the vanishing point. Although, you might want to ghost your lines a bit more. In the end, all of these exercises come down to ghosting and planning your lines, and executing them confidently. So don't get mad at me if I am saying it too much. Ghosting and planning was a very hard thing for me to do as well because I am a very impatient person. So my Homeworks have those same issues as well. But slowing down, trying to be more patient always helps you get better results.

Rotated Boxes:

I really like the rotation of your boxes. Also, your lines seem to be more confident here. You seem to understand the rotation, well.

Organic Perspective:

I liked this part. You expressed the depth very nicely. The last panel of the first page and the first panel of the second page looks a bit rushed. If you start getting bored and draw your lines randomly, take a little break and start again. Plan your every mark. As for the perspective, the 250 Box challenge will help you get better at it.

Since you are already in Lesson 3, I am sure you have done these exercises multiple times as warm-ups, and I am sure most of the things I mentioned here are no longer a problem for you. But it is always nice to go back to the previous lessons, read through the materials, and watch the videos to remember the concepts. Uncomfortable posted new videos explaining the Lesson 1 exercises, and they are very helpful. I recommend you watch them all if you haven't already.

It seems like you haven't finished the 250 Box Challenge, so I would recommend you finish it. If you have time, you can start from the beginning. If you don't, you can draw just the amount you need to reach 250.

Next Steps:

250 Box Challenge

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7:40 AM, Monday June 21st 2021

Thank you for this in-depth critique! Since I did this 2,5 months ago I feel a bit disconnected from it now but I definitely agree that line confidence is one of my biggest issues, then and now. Especially with circles. I feel like I have improved at least somewhat though, but I very much do appreciate the reminders you have given me of the basics of this course. Very valuable! :D