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9:41 PM, Friday June 10th 2022
When drawing your ellipses make sure to ghost the ellipse where you want to place it before drawing it in. Plot all your lines be it drawing the lines of cylinders or boxes, plot ghost and speedily draw them. Work line by line do not rush.
Arrows
For the arrows the initial line you draw should be smooth. It looks like you drew your lines slowly resulting in wobbles in the line. You should try and vary the lines you base the arrows off of. Here you did not use many variations. The lines you have joining te top and bottom curves of the arrows are not straight. It sees you rushed through these.
Which is the same for the contour ellipses, you should not having repeating lines for a contour. You draw one line if the line comes out wrong then move on do not repeat lines. I feel your contour lines should also have more of a curve to them. The contour ellipses look like you drew them slowly, again ghost ellipses and draw them with speed.
Dissections look rushed in many places. You should be thinking how each line will add to the drawing. The thick black marker lines you have for example don't convey any information amout the texture of the surfaces you where drawing.
The organic intersections look stiff. Remember you should imagine them as water filled balloons so think of how they will sag and hang when placed where they are. Your forms also have points on the end. Think of them like two spheres inside a sock on opposite ends.
For the intersections , you should show the intersection with a single line not the shading you are using.
For the cyliders the lines should touch both ellipses on either side, plot your lines.
Overall I think you rushed this. I will ask for revision. Do work slowly line by line, take breaks if need be. Think about each individual mark you make. For textures look at the reference, observe it.
Revision
1 page Arrows (Varying lengths and curves)
1 page organic intersections( think of them like balloons filled with water stacked , so they sag)
1 page intersections ( here use a line to show where the intersection occurs and not shading)
Good luck :)
10:34 PM, Wednesday June 15th 2022
1:22 AM, Friday June 17th 2022
Organic intersections shadows look patchy, you should outline the shadown then shade it in. If you don't have a brush pen I think its better to just outline the bigger shadows. Think of them as balloons, filled with water so they sag. Try and keep all the organic forms the same size.
Arrows are now more varied but you are connecting them wrong, When you have the two lines they will look like so. https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/011d064f.jpg then this is how the top and bottom are joined. Some of yours are not joined at all, as some are not one beneath the other, remember the other line is the sane as the other one. https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/9aae2104.jpg
The boxes of the intersections look better, I can see there is definite attempt to show intersection here.
Ill mark this complete but when doing warmups, I think it would benefit you to copy the video lessons. Youll catch things you missed the first time around.
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