Hello, I was really nervous to share my work but I understand the importance of receiving feedback, I hope someone can review my work soon so I can follow their advice and move to the next lesson. Thank you in advance, and I hope whoever is reading this has a good a day or night!
Hello Dramaticmoon! Today I'll be doing my best to give you a critique :]
First thing first, I noticed that you are using a pencil? It's not forbidden but it's not recommended, just putting it out there because part of the critique heavily relies on line quality or draftmanship. Just a personal advice, try to invest a 0.5 fineliner or at least a pen. Of course you can read this if you want to: https://drawabox.com/article/ink it explains fully on why should you use ink (especially if you are planning to do further lessons too). Otherwise let's get going.
I'll be dividing it into 3 parts of Lines, Ellipses, and Boxes.
Lines
Overall your lines has a lot of wobbles and not much confidence, it's important to have confidence over accuracy earlier since you will work on accuracy later down the line. So lesson 1 is very crucial on building a good foundation. Try reading over the part of drawing lines again: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/3
I can see your efforts here already but let me point out common mistakes that you did here. Arching lines in both Ghosted Planes and Ghosted Lines especially. Try to counter this with arching the opposite way of your tendency to arch. Also take account of the wobbly lines too. Either way you are going on the right direction, try to push yourself more to get the desired line work. It's all mileage and intentional drawing .
Ellipses
Your Ellipses are mostly fine. Good job on getting it contained and minimal overlapping in the Ellipses Tables. In the Ellipses in Planes are ok, not too accurate but you did what the homework serves. Funnel is also good, the ellipses looks like it's symmetrically cut in 2 halves by the minor axis. Most of the ellipses are drawn 2-3 times, and it's quite confident. Keep this up and try to get more confidence in your ellipses. All in all it's pretty good and going to the right direction.
Boxes
Boxes are pretty good. I have the same critique for the lines since boxes are just a bunch of lines. But I think you followed every guidelines for the boxes. Plotted Perspective looks neat, Rough Perspective is smudgy but correction line is on point, Organic Perspective, Rotated Boxes despite having wobbly lines looks tight and boxes look like they are rotating and are kept close.
Next Steps:
It's not stellar, but you followed what every guidelines needs for this lesson - it's pretty good for that in itself. I declare you graduate the lesson 1 whilst it's important to keep in mind of this in the critique. Now do 250 boxes!
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