Thank you so much for taking your time and reviewing my work. It really means a lot to me
Also little note: I drew in different colored fineliners I had lying around at home. They work perfectly fine and I don't want to buy new (black) ones if I have working ones.
Hello Cytori,
I hope you are well,
I don't think the color of your fineliner matters, but it is good practice to not be wasteful with your money and use up the remaining fineliners.
Starting with sausages
Those are quite great, as you change the degrees of the contours properly. There are few cases where you make your contour sloppy, but your overall intention is to make them fit inside. Additionally on the topic that includes your contours, the linework. There are places where it could be better, try to be more patient with it.
Moving to insects
Looking through them I notice that your line weight is applied "incorrectly". It is a little messy and I know you could do better as your linework is quite good as you can make straight lines if you commit to them. So for lineweight remember to also ghost for that process. What we want to do is add another line on top of our initial one and what we should get is an effect of our line becoming darker(as we give more ink to the line) and slightly wider(as ink spills slightly to the sides). Making our line wider isn't our goal, it is to make it stronger/darker. This diagram conveys what I am trying to say. Keep in mind that we don't apply the lineweight with our wrist, what we want to use is our shoulder. Line weight is about clarifying the overlap between forms in specific areas.
In your last beetle you made the segments of it "armor" too much 2d. This demo shows how we should tackle that part of an insect body. This might be caused as you used a top view, which I believe doesn't help us when we draw a 3d object. Additionally in front limbs, you have skipped quite a few steps building those "forearms". When we construct anything we want to add forms on top of forms. I went over this section of the drawing here, my execution is quite crude as I drew it with the mouse. But what I want you to gain from it, is that we draw those complex forms with stacking small simple ones to create a feel of a solid 3d drawing. You can see an example of this with this beetle horn demo, and even on this ant head demo.
Lastly in this demo, I think you didn't draw proper sausages for the back legs. You again draw a silhouette, which creates a 2d shape. This is how it should have been made.
In your dragonfly drawing I think it's wings are missaligned or that could be how the reference just is.
Conclusion
You did a good job absorbing the material covered in this lesson. In the future try to avoid the top view in your drawabox drawings. Now I will mark this lesson as complete.
If you have any questions feel free to ask me here,
Have fun on your journey,
Next Steps:
Continue to lesson 5
Hello Rivgar,
thank you so much for your detailed critique. I really appreciate the time you took to critique it and even drew on top of my drawings, it really clarified what you mean.
I feel like I've always struggled with adding line wight, because I often don't manage to go along the the original line and diverge, so I guess I subconscoiusly started drawing them from my wrist. Thank you for pointing that out, I'll keep it in mind and train it a little in my warmups.
For the beetle: Yeah, I noticed while drawing that a top-down view was really hard to convey a 3D object. You basically just saw the shell and the legs had somewhat leaf-like shapes and weren't round (https://www.pinterest.de/pin/400609329334961047/) and then the entire drawing just looked really flat... I should have done it like you drew it :)
Thank you again and have fun on your journey as well
This is a remarkable little pen. Technically speaking, any brush pen of reasonable quality will do, but I'm especially fond of this one. It's incredibly difficult to draw with (especially at first) due to how much your stroke varies based on how much pressure you apply, and how you use it - but at the same time despite this frustration, it's also incredibly fun.
Moreover, due to the challenge of its use, it teaches you a lot about the nuances of one's stroke. These are the kinds of skills that one can carry over to standard felt tip pens, as well as to digital media. Really great for doodling and just enjoying yourself.
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