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3:06 PM, Tuesday January 12th 2021

Very cool!

Arrows look good - maybe try being more dramatic in how they expand though? A few of them get narrower right before the arrowhead too, which sort of breaks the illusion.

For the drawn through sausage forms, most (not all) have ellipses with the same or similar degrees, which makes them look flat. The best one is the second from the top on the left I think. Same goes for the non-drawn through ones, the ellipses mostly have the same degree. My favorite here is the second from the bottom on the left.

I like your texture analysis and dissections. I think you did a really good job finding ways to break the silhouette - the apricot center and cabbage are my two favorites. The pill bug shell looks flat, since it doesn't seem like the lines follow the form as much as they should.

Intersections are nice, but I'm still struggling to visualize these in general - so all I can really say is I don't see anything that's obviously wrong.

For the piles of organic forms, there's a good sense of space, but I think the shadows could be improved. For example in this one https://imgur.com/CatNYxi, the straight one on the top should be casting shadows on the forms below, not just at the two ends. Same with the form on the bottom left - I think there should be more of a shadow on the ground.

8:27 PM, Tuesday January 12th 2021

Hi, thank you for the critique. Do you think I should move on to lesson 3?

2:29 AM, Wednesday January 13th 2021

Yes, I think so! Just really pay attention to the flatness as you draw plants so they really pop.

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