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5:17 AM, Thursday February 10th 2022

Some of your lines are wobbly and there are a lot of groups of lines that are fraying on both ends. Try to take your time setting up the pen before drawing and then do more ghosting. On the other hand, your ghosted lines looks better as they are mostly accurate and straighter than the previous exercise. Although, you could add more lines to fill out the page and add more practice. As for your ghosted planes, it's the same as I've said before that it has some wobbly lines but they are somewhat accurate. You should've took pictures of them before adding the ellipses but since the submission is clean enough for me to observe the planes, then it's fine.

It looked like you tried your best to make the ellipse touch the four sides of the plane but it sacrificed confidence. Remember that confidence is top priority over accuracy especially in lines. There are also some ellipses that are not tight which indicates you had trouble making your lines closer together. Your tables of ellipses are filled with as much ellipses as possible but suffers the same problems as the ellipse in planes. As for your funnels exercise, the ellipses are not aligned to the center line, aren't symmetrical and also doesn't take up all of the space as there are some ellipses that aren't touching each other.

The boxes also has some wobbly lines but looks better than the previous exercises. It looks like you tried to make each box submit to the vanishing point and did a good job at it. The organic perspective has fewer wobbly lines and you have a good variety of angles of the boxes. It's clear that you have made significant progress on your confidence throughout this lesson.

Overall, the mistakes you made is normal considering this is the first lesson and you will develop the habit of drawing better lines with more warm-ups.

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12:16 AM, Friday February 11th 2022

Thank you so much for taking the time to critique my homework! I definitely noticed during my self review that my ellipses were very shaky so I've been incorporating them into all of my warm ups. Speaking of which I seem to be looser and more confident during warm up, and then feel more pressure during the actual homework exercises. Anyway thank you again, I will be sure to focus on confident ellipses (and better placement), as well as setting up the pen as I'm ghosting!

4:17 AM, Friday February 11th 2022

I'm glad to be of help!

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