1:17 AM, Wednesday September 2nd 2020
Hi Cybertortoise,
I've checked your submission,
Okay, wanna start out by saying that I really like all the enthusiasm that is in this lesson, It really shows that you put the effort in! Keep this attitude up, you will learn a lot.
Now, on to the actual feedback!
First, your contour lines look good and ,as I have already stated, it's good that you made a lot of them in each organic form. However, from now on, try to reduce the amount of contour lines that you do per form. Don't get me wrong, you did exactly what you had to do for the exercise, but this is an advice for future lessons, remember that contour lines are supposed to show that the forms you are drawing are 3d, this is easily stated with only on or two contour lines in a form. If you look at your organic intersections exercise for example, it's well done, but in some parts is a little messy, because of the amount of contour lines that you put per form. Uncomfortable will touch on this topic in lesson 3, so keep it in mind!
Texture! Now, I looks like you enjoyed this part (I sure did at the time), well at least I hope. I seems that you got the point of analyzing different textures and building up a visual library. Though, I wanted to comment on the topic of implicit vs explicit content. The point of the dissections exercise it's to start to make you think about observation and analyzing textures, but seeing that you did good at this, I want to strech it a little further. The thing is, you are putting explicitly everything you see in the texture, into the form, which again it's what you are supposed to do in this exercise. But, when it comes to drawing you gotta strive to make as you were putting all that content, and let the viewers fool themselves! I would try to explaing this myself as best as I can, but I recommend you to watch again the video on the lesson that talks about this, Uncomfortable really explains this topic in depth.
Another thing that I tend to see on your textures is that sometimes you didn't use cast shadows, but just draw forms. Keep an eye on this since the way we implicitly communicate information in textures is through cast shadows.
The only thing I wanna say about your form intesections it's line weight. Remember that it's supposed to be subtle, don't get too invested on it.
Another last thing in your organic intesections exercise is a little like the last one, cast shadows are also supposed to be subbtle, we are making a thick black mark, yes, but remember that it doesn't needs to be big. Remember, everything we draw in a exercise is supposed to communicate something, if you can communicate that an object is on top of another object with a smaller shadow, you should go for the smaller one.
I'm gonna mark this lesson as complete! You did a really good job, Keep it up.
Next Steps:
Move on to lesson 3!