2:44 PM, Thursday December 2nd 2021
Hi there, I'll be handling your box challenge critique.
Not only does the challenge help deepen your understanding of important concepts but it shows your desire to learn as well. That being said I'll try to keep this critique fairly brief so you can get working on the next steps as soon as possible.
Things you did well:
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Your lines are mostly drawn smoothly and confidently. There is the occasional wobble and it tends to happen more frequently in your hatching lines. This leads me to believe you may be hesitating while trying to keep your lines accurate. Remember that line confidence is our top priority and accuracy will improve with mileage. If you have to go past your intended stopping point to keep your line smooth then do so for now.
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I can see that you're using the ghosting method to space your hatching lines evenly. This helps keep your boxes looking tidy and makes them appear more solid as well.
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Good work experimenting with orientations and proportions. Experimenting is a crucial part of learning any skill. It helps form a more well rounded understanding so I hope it'll be a habit you continue to build and demonstrate in the future.
Things you can work on:
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Line weight isn't a requirement of this challenge but I do recommend that you try applying it when drawing boxes in the future. It's a useful tool but one that most people need to build mileage with before they feel comfortable applying it so getting an early start will help you see better results sooner.
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I want you to experiment with rates of foreshortening, currently you keep your vanishing points far from your boxes and try to keep your lines close to parallel. Mix it up by bringing your vanishing points in closer to see how your lines react and converge more dramatically.
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There are times when your lines converge in pairs and you often attempt to keep your lines too parallel which results in them diverging. This is an example of lines converging in pairs, and this shows the relation between each line in a set and their respective vanishing point. The inner pair of lines will be quite similar unless the box gets quite long and the outer pair can vary a lot depending on the location of the vanishing point. Move it further away and the lines become closer to parallel while moving it closer increases the rate of foreshortening
The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.
I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds off concepts in the previous course material so if you move forward with un-addressed issues you end up just creating further issues on top of them.
I'd like you to draw 20 more boxes please. Focus on experimenting with rates of foreshortening by changing the distance at which you place your vanishing points and getting rid of some of the hesitation in your line work. This is a good opportunity to try applying line weight as well.
Once you've completed your boxes reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready I'll move you on to the next lesson.
I know you can do this and look forward to seeing your work.
Next Steps:
20 more boxes please.