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9:56 PM, Friday May 31st 2024
edited at 10:28 PM, May 31st 2024

Great job finishing all the exercises of Lesson 1! I'm going to try and critique your submission using the official critique guide.

Starting with your Lines:

Your Superimposed Lines look solid to me. Most fraying is on the far side, which is expected. The wobbling is barely noticeable and it looks to me you've taken care to execute your lines confidently using your whole arm.

Your Ghosted Lines show a slight increase in wobbliness, maybe because of hesitation or from using your wrist to try and hit the mark. It's obvious you've understood your assignment very well, but I would just take this opportunity to say that executing your lines confidently and from your shoulder takes priority over accuracy at this point in the course.

Ghosted Planes: The lines look more confident here, which is great! You've clearly ghosted your lines very thoroughly, and you filled the pages with all different kinds of sizes and shapes of planes.

Moving on to Ellipses:

Your Tables of Ellipses look good, except for some of the last ellipses of the second page, which look as if they haven't been drawn through two full times. It's perfectly understandable to want to finish an exercise quickly when you're that close to the end of it, but (if that was the case) remember that time isn't supposed to be a factor here.

On to Ellipses in Planes, then. You've drawn through your ellipses, and you've strived to have them touch all four edges of their respective planes. Some of them look a little bit deformed, which again could be explained by focusing to much on accuracy, rather than on executing a smooth, confident mark.

Your Funnels page looks fine. You've taken care to make sure your ellipses touch the sides of your funnels, and you've drawn through all of them. Not all of them are aligned to the central minor axis, but you've certainly attempted to do that. Slight increase in wobbliness, which could be attributed to points already made.

Boxes:

A very good Plotted Perspective! Even your back edges look good. If I had to nitpick, I would note that some of your verticals maybe aren't perfectly perpendicular to the horizon line.

Rough Perspective is, again, well executed. You've kept the front and back faces of your boxes rectangular, and you've applied your line extensions correctly. Your freehand lines appear to have been thoroughly ghosted as well.

A very good attempt at Rotated Boxes. It passes all the checks, and I'd also like to point out that it shows you've considered all the boxes' rotation in 3D space. Nice, confident line execution all throughout the exercise!

Organic Perspective is good. You're using the Y method, you're ghosting your lines, and your sets of parallel edges are mostly converging rather than diverging. You're also not leaning into particularly dramatic foreshortening, but striving to keep your boxes' respective edges' convergence reasonably shallow. Regrettably, I can only see one page of this exercise included in your submission, whereas the assignment asks for two full pages.

In conclusion, I'm confident your submission would be marked as complete by any sane member of this community (including myself) if you'd only included your second page of Organic Perspective. Your submitted work suggests you have learned the material well, but I can't mark it as complete unless all the assigned pages are included.

Next Steps:

1 page of Organic Perspective. None of your work needs any revision, but we need to see this final page to mark your submission as complete.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 10:28 PM, May 31st 2024
8:54 PM, Saturday June 1st 2024

[https://imgur.com/a/v1fEA1W]

Sorry I forgot that last page of organic perspective, let me know if this one is satisfactory!

Thank you for taking the time to review me! The rotated boxes were definitely a challenge, but I can feel my line confidence improving with each lesson. :)

12:24 PM, Sunday June 2nd 2024

As expected, it looks good! I'm going to mark your submission as complete, and suggest you move on to the 250 Box Challenge. Well done!

Next Steps:

Add the exercises from lesson 1 to your warmup pool and proceed to the 250 Box Challenge.

This community member feels the lesson should be marked as complete, and 2 others agree. The student has earned their completion badge for this lesson and should feel confident in moving onto the next lesson.
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