8:33 PM, Tuesday February 16th 2021
Hey, Lunando here. First of all a little general tip: Try to always take the best possible photos of your work as that makes it way easier for people to critique it. Make sure you have a good lighting (Sunlight is usually best) and make sure you don't have shaky/blurry pictures. With that being said let's get right to it.
Lines
Alright, your Superimpose Lines are looking pretty good. You're still struggling quite a bit with the curved lines but that's something that will get better with practice! Although it isn't really an issue in most of your lines it is worth mentioning that you should try to stay away from fraying on both ends, meaning try to always start on a single point and keeping that one "clean". Moving on to your Ghosted Lines I really like the confidence in your lines here, you're not afraid of overshooting or inaccurate lines, which is great! Although overshooting is secondary, it certainly is something you would want to keep working on in the long run. I also think that you could've varied the length of your lines more as we want to be able to confidently do long lines as well as short lines. In your Ghosted Planes that confidence continues, it's great that you don't seem to be afraid of making mistakes and that you didn't try to correct any lines which ended up shorter or not at the right place, as that tends to make the mistakes only more obvious.
Ellipses
I see that you definitely had your difficulties with the Ellipses which is totally normal in the beginning! One major thing that I'm noticing is that in your Tables of Ellipses you didn't draw through the majority of your Ellipses twice as explained in the instructions here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/11/drawingthrough. Leaving a lot of them with pointy ends and uneven so that they aren't actual Ellipses anymore. In your Ellipses in Planes sometimes you did go over them twice, mostly in your second pages, but in the remaining you didn't. Same goes for the Funnels. This is something really important as our main goal is to create confident marks and smooth and even ellipses. Which is more important than being super precise about their placement. Always put confidence over accuracy.
Boxes
In your Plotted Perspective I would recommend you to completely extend your Lines to their vanishing points and not only drawing the parts relevant to the boxes but that isn't such a big deal. But one thing I want to bring up is hatching: Hatching here is optional, if you decide to do it, don't just do it sloppily or rush it. Use your ruler if allowed or use the ghosting method to create tidy evenly spaced and parallel hatching. As mentioned in the instructions here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/step8. Your rough perspective looks pretty good here and there are a few perspective issues but that's something you'll work on in the 250 Box Challenge. Moving on to your Rotated Boxes I like the fact that you actually rotated your boxes and that you tried to keep the gaps in between your boxes mostly consistent. You missed drawing through the boy in the lower left corner and the back planes of your boxes are a bit off generally as there should be a similar half sphere in the back. Keeping in mind that this is definitely the hardest exercise from lesson 1 I still want you to stay mindful of your linework. Always ghost and plan your lines thoroughly and most important: don't go over lines multiple times in order to "fix" them as that will only create more clutter and will lead more attention to the mistake itself. Once a line has been put down we must work with it. But since you weren't supposed to be really ready for this exercise it's fine. Great that you pushed through it! In your Organic Perspective is again some of the just mentioned "line fixing habit" but apart from that and a and few perspective issues, once again on which you'll work in the 250 Box challenge, they're pretty good.
Next Steps:
So before you move on o the 250 Box Challenge which comes after Lesson 1 I would like you to submit the following:
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1 Page Tables of Ellipses
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1 Page Ellipses in Planes
Give these sections another read/watch and draw through ALL of your ellipses ;).
See ya!