11:28 PM, Friday October 15th 2021
Hello and congrats on completing lesson one. My name is Rob and I'm a teaching assistant for Drawabox who will be handling your lesson one critique. Starting with your superimposed lines these are off to a fine start. You are keeping a clearly defined starting point with all of your wavering at the opposite end. Your ghosted lines and planes turned out well. You are using the ghosting method to good effect to get confident linework with a pretty decent deal of accuracy that will get better and better with practice.
Your tables of ellipses are coming along pretty good. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and focusing on consistent smooth ellipse shapes. This is carried over nicely into your ellipses in planes. It's great that you aren't overly concerned with accuracy and are instead focused on getting smooth ellipse shapes. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come with mileage and consistent practice more than anything else. Your ellipses in funnels are having some issues with tilting off the minor axis. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/notaligned This is something you should always start considering when drawing your ellipses. Your ellipses are off to a great start but there's still room for improvement when it comes to accuracy so keep practicing them during your warmups.
The plotted perspective looks fine although I do want to mention the hatching you added here and in some of the later exercises. Adding hatching to the front plane of a box is fine but you should be treating the hatch marks you put down the same as every other line would draw during these lessons. Ghost it multiple times and then draw from your shoulder with confidence. You should never mindlessly be putting down marks. Your rough perspective exercises turned out pretty good. It's great that you are keeping up with the confident linework on these but I have to say I am a bit concerned with how much you are redrawing lines. Your initially confident linework is taking a huge hit in quality because you are redrawing so many lines and adding line weight. You are doing a good job extending the lines back on your boxes to check your work. As you can see some of your perspective estimations were quite off but that will become more intuitive with practice. One thing that can help you a bit when doing a one point perspective exercise like this is to realize that all of your horizontal lines should be parallel to the horizon line and all of your verticals should be perpendicular(straight up and down in this case) to the horizon line. This will help you avoid some of the slanting lines you have in your constructions.
Your rotated box exercise turned out pretty well. I like that you drew this nice and big as that really helps when dealing with complex spatial problems. You also did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. While you didn't nail the rotations perfectly this was a good attempt overall. This is a great exercise to come back to after a few lessons to see how much your spatial thinking ability has improved. The more concerning thing I'm seeing in your last few exercises is an overall drop in line quality and a lot of redrawn lines. There is also quite a bit of mindless hatching and scribble on this rotated box exercise. Your organic perspective exercises are still having issues with line quality which I'd like you improve on before moving on to the 250 box challenge and you are also missing the second page of this exercise. As I mentioned with your rough perspective exercise it does seem that you are getting intially confident linework but you are often times comprimising it by adding line weight and redrawing lines which is making things look a lot messier overall. Your box constructions are decent for the most part but there are some wonky ones here and there so the 250 box challenge will be a great next step for you. Before that though I'd like you to do one more page of the organic perspective exercise with a focus on confident linework. No redrawing lines or adding line weight. Make sure you are ghosting all of your lines and then drawing from you shoulder.
Overall this was a decent submission that really just started having some issues with line quality once you had to start drawing boxes. You seem to understand how to get confident linework at first but you often times ruin it by adding too much line weight or by redrawing lines a lot. So before moving on to the 250 box challenge I'd like you to be able to draw boxes with better quality linework overall. As a revision I'd like you to do one more page of the organic perspective exericise but also don't forget to upload your missing page as well.
Missing One Page of the Organic Perspective Exercise
As a revision do one more page of the organic perspective exercise with a focus on confident linework. No redrawing lines or adding line weight. Make sure you are ghosting all of your lines and then drawing from you shoulder.