6:36 PM, Tuesday March 8th 2022
Hi! So, starting with your sausages, while still a bit wobbly, they look a lot more like simple sausages. The idea of changing degrees comes across well enough on the ones with ellipses, but when it comes to the curves, they all show almost the exact same degree; the curves sometimes misalign with the minor axis, and aren't as precise overall.
As for your insects:
The first one looks a lot more solid, cleaner, with better construction and more believable masses added on top, so I'll point out the issues. I don't know the bug you drew, but unless it had no discernible head at all (like a scorpion), you skipped the head ball on the initial construction. Start with just a ball, then add complexity on top of it.
Furthermore, both back legs, but especially the one that's behind the body, relied too heavily on observation when constructed, like you tried to catch all the detail and form of the leg on the first try, instead of starting with a simple sausage and adding forms later. They will look weird, as it is hard to control the width of the sausage on such long dimensions (when you start at least), but remember that the point of these exercises is to study construction, not for them to look nice or even close to the reference (although is nice when that happens).
The legs behind the body aren't drawn through the body (we can't see where they intersect it), that's another thing that tells me that you relied more on observation. Again, it looks nice, but it defeats the point of the exercises.
The second bug has all of these issues but even more pronounced. It looks flat, as most of the intersections don't look like intersections at all, but simple subdivisions on a flat page. The sausages lost their form, trying again to replicate all the complexity on first draft. I'd keep listing problems, but they all have to do with the same issues discussed before.
In relation with this last insect, I'll leave you this revision on wings and these two on the overall construction of similar bugs. In any case, here's the revision by Uncomfortable himself where those examples came from. You'll find out some of your same issues on that submission, so it will be good if you can read the whole thing.
I'll ask you for a couple of things before moving on. First, another page of Organic Forms with Contour Curves (just curves, not ellipses). It's not my intention to grind you with these (and you'll have a lot of opportunities to work with them in Lesson 5), but I think you can make them a lot better, they're also intertwined with the issues of your constructions, so it's good practice.
And second, I'll ask you to draw again that last bug, the dragonfly, taking into consideration all the corrections. Read this again, and think of it when you're working on the legs/tail of your dragonfly. Focus as well on making your initial construction (head, thorax, abdomen) solid and believable, before moving on with other masses.
That's it! If you have any questions, feel free to ask.
Next Steps:
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1 page of Organic Forms with Contour Curves (just curves, not ellipses)
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Redraw the dragonfly.