8:45 AM, Friday March 10th 2023
Congrats to have complete lesson 2 !
Arrows : First your lines are good as a whole however try to not repeat your lines if you did a mistake, just write it down in your head. Secondly you arrows are not really compressing, the arrows need to get bigger and bigger as they go towards the viewer. Both in size, and the spacing between each fold.
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https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/0f7c806c.jpg
And Last but not at least be carefull with lineweight, here is some important points on lineweight :
-When adding lineweight to the arrows, they should only be done with 1 line, no more so the lineweight is not overdone.
-Lineweight needs to be done with a confident, ghosted line. Tracing over the previous line slowly is a mistake.
-Lineweight should only be added to the part that overlaps as well, it is not needed to add lineweight to the full line.
Organic forms : First your ellipses are not really confident so you should rework that,secondly I notice that your ellipses was struggling with the angle of your ellipse, here is something that may help you : https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/6822fd02.jpg
Then you are actually hooking the contours of your sausages which is great but try to make them a little bit more with confidence (ghosting method and using your shoulder is the key). To conclud with Organic forms, your ellipses touching the boundaries which is good however your ellipses are misaligned on the the axis line. https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/4d7871e1.jpg
Textures : Good work !
Dissections : Nothing to say, again :)
Form Intersections : I'm not going to get ahead of myself on this exercise, but it seems correct to me.
Organic intersection : Well last exercice, So the only thing that I notice is your shadows which are too big , what I mean by that is that it takes up too much space however as a whole It's seem correct, you understand the exercice.
Next Steps:
Hehe Homework time :) (sorry)
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1 page of arrows
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2 page of Organic forms ( one with ellipses and one with hooking lines).