You can probably tell but later on I focused more on the lines than the box I guess, I focused On making good lines and keeping them parallel instead of drawing a box, which I think resulted In them being better.
Hi I'll be handling the critique for your 250 box challenge
It is good that you are trying different approaches, this challenge is all about getting the students to experiment with their boxes and to get the feel for how to work with 3D, but I think it is worth to make an observation, focusing strictly on lines may undermine your work in the long run, keep in mind that every mark we put down brings something tree dimensional to the scene, you may say that a line exist only in two dimensions and you'd be right but think more about like this, each line brings a new plane to the construction, once you've put down your first three lines you have defined the planes with which you are going to work with. Ultimately these is a matter of approach but I considered important to bring it up.
So now let's move to the boxes themselves.
-A problem that shows up consistently throughout your work is a tendency to extend your lines in the wrong direction, you noticed in some cases, it was when your lines diverged, maybe you didn't ask yourself why this happened but it is definitely there take look at boxes (143, 147 and 175 as example), here's a rough guide that may help you with this.
-Another consistent problem with your work is your use of lineweight, remember that you have to ghost those additional lines, if you messed up I think the best thing to do is to leave like that. Only add lineweight to the contour of boxes, one superimposed line is enough as you want to keep it subtle.
In some pages you added little boxes, this is not something you should do, keep in mind that it more difficult to ghost your lines and draw form your shoulder.
The hatching lines should also be drawn using the ghosting method you don't want to just throw them like that so keep that in mind.
-And as final note keep an eye for diverging lines as shown here, your lines have to converge even if it's just slightly, they can never be diverging or be parallel.
It seems that some pages are missing but as I have already put some time in this critique I'm not going to ask you to upload them.
Next Steps:
Before you can move on I want you to draw 30 more boxes, take your time and. keep all things mentioned above in mind. Good luck
Okay! Thank You for taking your time to help me I will send the revisions as soon as I complete them!
Hello, I am glad to hear from you again, seeing that I wrote this critique a few months ago, anyway I'll quickly go over some points and we'll see how much you have improved
Linework
-It seems that you have been more mindful when drawing your marks, you are still repeating some of your marks but this issue has diminished considerably, remember that if you make a mistake you should not try to correct it by drawing on top of it, instead leave it alone and move on, this way you will develop the discipline and patience necessary to do your assignments to the best of your ability.
-The hatching looks tidier and you have also improved quite a bit here, keep using the ghostin method to think about each mark’s purpose and how you are going to achieve it best, keep in mind that each line is no less important for being part of a larger group, give each additional line as much attention and focus as it requires.
-Also I can see you are not using lineweight a lot, it is not necessary ut you want to get used to it, so take a look at this diagram which explains how to apply lineweight correctly
Box Construction
-You still struggle to extend your lines in the right direction, a good example are boxes 11, 12 and 16, again remember that our initial Y lines will be pointing towards the vanishing point and they will determine the direction in which they will be extended. Take a look at this guide, especially the first two paragraphs https://imgur.com/ElrX3JM
-Keep an eye for lines converging in pairs as shown here, the more you practice the better you will get at this and eventually your lines will converge in sets rather than pairs, also I wanted to quickly redirect you to this diagram which shows the relationship between each pair of line and the angles they form respective to their vanishing points.
-Lastly I want you to keep experimenting with the orientation and foreshortening of the boxes if you have trouble coming up with new angles and proportions for your boxes, take a look at this image which you can use as reference.
The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.
Okay, you may want to revisit some of the lesson 1 exercises and see how well you do, you can be a little rusty after three months. There have been some updates to lesson 0 and I want you to go and watch them if you haven’t already. That is it for now I’ll go ahead an mark this as complete
Next Steps:
Lesson 2
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