Hello Emoki.

Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1! This is the start of your Drawabox journey and you clawed your way through, now even more awaits you, and I hope my critique will help you face the next challenges you might encounter.

Starting with

• Lines Section

Superimposed Lines

First of all, good job with your lines, I can tell that you're drawing from the shoulder since most of them are smooth and confident, even if they aren't always the straightest they're still unbroken and flow nicely, it's a great start and you definitely improve upon it in your second page. Keep practicing this exercise during your warm ups, especially the longer lines, and with time your mileage and muscle memory will allow you to make these confident and straight lines as easy as breathing.

What I wish to point is your impatience. You have fraying on both sides of your lines, especially in the curves, which shows that you didn't always line the tip of your pen to the start of your line. Remember: the fraying should be kept on one side only, even though this happens less in your second page, the presence of fraying on both ends still shows impatience.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/8/fraying

It's normal to become impatient during these exercises, especially if you're a beginner, but rushing will only hinder your progress and get you worse results, it's crucial that you always take the extra care before starting a new line. It's very important since it's how we apply proper lineweight later on.

How to apply lineweight: https://m.imgur.com/OHvr7Mb

Ghosted Lines

I think your mark making falters in quality in this exercise, you have more noticeable wobble in some of your lines, plenty of arching, undershooting and overshooting.

It seems like some of your lines are better than others, those might be the most recent ones as you got more comfortable with the exercise. Even though some of your lines aren't the straightest, they flow nicely. Which is very good.

My biggest recommendation? Simply add this exercise to your list of warm ups. Keep in mind that accuracy is not the most important, confident lines are, don't forget to draw from the shoulder and always rotate your page as well, with some experimenting you'll find what works best for you.

Also, reminder to look over these:

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/wobbling

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/arc

Ghosted Planes

You did a good job at placing the lines that cut your plane horizontally and vertically, they aren't perfect but they're good enough and help the illusion that your planes are surfaces moving through a 3d space. Keep that up and always remember that these lines should cut your planes ( in perspective ) into two equal halves.

On top of the problems mentioned before, what stands out most to me is that you didn't use the ghosting method for every line in your planes beyond the initial square. Every line we make must be done by plotting it beforehand, otherwise we're ghosting towards no goal.

"Don't worry about letting them overlap or things getting cluttered - it's all perfectly fine, what's important is that you're putting the time into the ghosting method for each and every line you produce." - Uncomfortable. This goes for any mark made in this course, unless otherwise specified. Including ghosted planes.

On top of that I strongly recommend that in future warm ups, you experiment with more variation of sizes, degrees, angles and dramatic perspective, as many of your planes are of similar sizes and angles. Try pushing the limits of what you can do.

• Ellipses Section

Table of Ellipses

I feel like you misunderstood what drawing through your ellipses actually means. I think you get it by ellipses in planes since they start looking more like what they're supposed to, but nonetheless I'll point it out: You're supposed to draw an ellipse in clockwise ( or anti-clockwise, if that's the most comfortable for you ) motion, ghosting it, then put the actual mark down and continue drawing your ellipse until you completed this motion 2 times.

Don't start an ellipse, and when you reach the start of the first line, do a 180° and go in the opposite direction.

Here, watch these videos again if you haven't already, they're the most updated version of the information Uncomfortable seeks to teach, and in there he even has demonstrations of drawing ellipses.

https://youtu.be/tHJ3rzk6kno

https://youtu.be/7WLmXufShyA

Also, you're drawing through some ellipses too much, only draw through them 2 or 3 times, more than that makes them look uneven and messy. You're having through keeping them within bounds as well, leaving too much space between them when they should be touching, but not overlapping.

Ellipses in planes

I feel like while this is the exercise where you start understanding how to draw proper ellipses, you also focus too much on accuracy, which makes many of your ellipses wobbly and deformed.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/12/deformed

Funnels

It's.... Very difficult to analyze this exercise due to the very blurry photo. Therefore I won't comment on it.

• Boxes Section

Plotted Perspective

You misunderstood the point of the exercise, while there are certainly lines going back to vanishing points, they don't all end AT the vanishing point put down on the page, this is not how 2pp works. Your boxes are clearly free-handed, not all are drawn through, and your extended lines are also not drawn with a straight edge.

On top of that you shaded some of the faces of your boxes wrong by shading the back face instead.

Your homework should look a bit more like this:

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/example

Please read over the entirety of the boxes section again and play close attention to the instructions and steps. You can also watch the video demonstration linked at the top of the homework page.

Rough Perspective

Good job on keeping height lines perpendicular to the horizon line, and width lines mostly parallel. They can still use some work but I can see that effort has been put into this part of the exercise.

Howevwr beyond that you seem to have misunderstood the steps for this homework page, or simply rushed/was too afraid to go through all the way sometimes.

Many boxes weren't finished, and boxes that were finished, didn't have any extended lines to check for mistakes. Some of your extended lines seem very straight as if they were drawn with the required straight edge, but some are super wobbly, bend and curve, on top of that you extended multiple lines for some boxes, and extended them to the vanishing point instead of the horizon line.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/step6

Rotated Boxes

Good job on getting through this exercise, it's a tough one. I don't see much redone lines which is a great, but always remember to not redo any lines as once a mistake is made, it cannot be fixed.

You had trouble keeping the edges of the boxes between each other narrow, you didn't draw through some boxes, and some of your boxes have no rotation, you also didn't use neighboring boxes as guidelines when trying to guess the vanishing points for your new boxes. You also applied the hatching to the wrong spots.

I suggest that you pay close attention to the steps mentioned in the homework page and watch the demonstration video linked there.

Organic Perspective

No redone lines is very good, it helps build confidence in our strokes.

Some of your boxes are actually triangles. You seem to be struggling with the longer boxes for some reason. And also with rotating them freely, although you did understand the idea of them getting smaller as they get further away.

Don't worry much as you'll get more experience with rotating boxes of all sizes and from all angles during the 250 boxes as well as how to properly build a box.

I won't be moving you onto 250 boxes just yet, I believe you misunderstood some steps and might have rushed some of these exercises instead of doing them to the best of your current ability.

Since I can see some improvement in your exercises I think asking you to redo this entire lesson is unnecessary, instead I will only be asking that you reply with the following:

1 page of the Funnels exercise.

1 page of Plotted perspective exercise.

1 page of Rough perspective exercise.

So I can analyze your work and move you on to 250 boxes if you're ready. Don't forget that when you do, add these exercises to your list of warm ups.