Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses and Boxes
1:45 PM, Tuesday April 16th 2024
Hello here is my first homework submission.
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6:32 PM, Tuesday April 16th 2024
Hello! I'm new but I'll be using the critique guide to try and give some feedback.
Lines:
Your ghosted lines page has a lot of arcing, so you may be drawing more from your elbow than your shoulder, and/or may be worrying partway through the line about getting to the second dot. We're meant to prioritize confidence over accuracy, so bending the line to meet the endpoint is less beneficial than keeping it straight and missing it. That said, I don't see any wobbling here, so that's good! You probably have a decent speed going with your lines, and it seems relatively confident.
Your superimposed lines look great to me! There's some fraying, but that was to be expected and isn't an issue for this, but a couple of the lines seem to fray a bit on both ends. It helps me to take the time to put the pen tip on the starting dot more deliberately before executing the stroke.
Ellipses:
I've got nothing to say about your tables of ellipses — they look good to me and followed the instructions! My only advice would be to play around with variety more, like different sizes/directions of ellipses, and sections with curvy/diagonal lines like in the example hw.
Wow, your ellipses in ghosted planes looks fantastic! I'm struggling a lot with those but it seems you've got a good grasp!
Funnels seem good, just remember we're supposed to draw a perpendicular axis in the center of the line, where the two innermost ellipses will be on either side. (You may have done that but the lines are too short to tell)
Boxes:
For the plotted perspective, I don't feel competent or knowlegeable enough to critique this one. It looks great to me, but take that with a grain of salt, because I may be missing something.
Good variety in the rough perspective exercise! I can tell you tried to cover a lot of bases, and though you missed the vanishing point at times, the overall accuracy isn't bad (better than I did lol). I will say your lines on these boxes are a fair bit wobblier than they've been up til now. You may be drawing from your wrist instinctively with shorter lines (I know I accidentally do), and/or you may be too hesitant and slow. Try ghosting each edge enough times until you don't feel worried about being "perfect," and then execute the line.
Your rotated boxes page definitely suffers from too much space between boxes, which the lesson warned us about. Try to keep your dots closer when plotting your adjacent plane, and remember the vanishing point(s) move for each box. You also seem to have accidentally put 3 boxes to the left of the center one instead of 2, and only one box below the center, again instead of two. I feel like the outer corners are missing, too, but I honestly struggled to understand those myself, so I'm not sure. You might have to redo this one before I can mark it as complete, being sure to follow the instructions and draw the correct number of boxes.
Your organic perspective pages look great to me! I'm no expert here, and haven't gotten feedback on mine yet, so again I may be missing something and you might want a second opinion for this. But from where I'm standing, it's excellent!
That's all I've got, hope this was helpful! Feel free to ping me in the Discord (@quinintheclouds) when you submit the redone rotated boxes page! Or on the site? I don't know how it works yet, but I'm happy to help if I can!
Good job and good luck!
Next Steps:
I wish I could mark it as complete, but the rotated boxes exercise is unfinished and possibly rushed. As I said above, you have the wrong number of boxes on multiple sides, and the gaps between them are very wide. Take your time to understand your marks before drawing each plane, and go step by step. The lesson kinda skips a lot it seems, but I checked out the link to the student video recording at the bottom of the assignment's page, and the version they're following has a lot more steps broken down, which might make it easier (I haven't watched it much yet, but it could help). You've got this!
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